If you are Bad, Then I am your Dad

Wth... WHAT THE HELL! ok tbis is on my cellphone but famn do I need to write a fucking Review for this magical phenomenom of a story I mean.. I startet reading it yesterday and whee where to Start short version:It was 23 in the nightI need a new story I am bored and tiredUhh? A cooking story hmm well who cares might as well try it. 8AM next day... Where am I... What time is it? Why are my eyes burning.. Falls asleepDreams of dog delicous food and some guy beating me up and ripping of my cloth before I got eaten by the dogWakes up 13:33...Wait what happend.. Take a look at my handy 2% charge left chapter 73/73...Wtf this was the most amazing story I ever read in my life WHAT THE FUCK DID I DREAM I WAS NEARLY RAPED BY A DOG UGH WHY ONLY 5 CHAPTERS A WEEK FUCK YOU CRUEL WORLD FUCK YOU!

I hope many authors are inspired to make MCs like ff this.... Because most of them often make typical Japanese beta MCs that are annoying. 😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍

The writing quality is great not many problems with grammar and the likes, but the storyline is a bit erratic and don’t have a good build up at the beginning. Imo the first 50 chapters are the foundation of a story, and should be where the reader decides to stay or drop the novel. I myself probably won’t finish the novel as I dislike any holes in the story, especially at the beginning and skipping time without at least a summary of what happened in the next couple chapters.Not trying to say the author is bad or anything, for a novice it’s pretty good, but I’ve read many of these different world/kingdom building novels so this one failed to keep my interest.Give it a read though, and support the author as they could be a hidden gem that just needs a polish, as we all need more good stories. Keep up the good work!

So far so good. The world building and storyline seem to be progressing well with little to no grammatical errors — But I’d hate to be the MC, lol. That guy be down for a whole new world of pain.

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Definitely a hidden gem on this website.The writing quality (grammar etc.) is very good.The characters are quite dynamic and I really like the world building until now.I really hope the author doesn't drop this.