issue (for me)
the system is not as idle as the title seem to be
and the date seems to be unnecessary considering the mc character (slow, don't want to deal with other)
as for the world building, i think its a bit grand to start from practically zero to universe.
and lastly the author comment is immersion breaking coz its too long. make it short and concise so it doesn't mix with the story
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An extremely well-written and interesting start. Hope more chapters are coming soon.
P.S. Author, please leave in the book's synopsis a Disc0rd or something to get in touch :) I would love to talk more or to know when more updates are coming.
Excellent start to what appears to be a very good story. Hopefully the author will continue updating and make this an excellent novel or series.
The writing is good, some miner problem with word usage and spelling. The story is compelling and catches you up in it even though currently there are only 5 chapters.
MC is a veteran, apparently some type of special operations trooper, who has been wounded and medically retired. He has adopted the neighborhood that he lives in and appears to be seen as the "big brother" of the rough area.
Please Author-san, give us more....
so found this when it was first written and loved it, saw it got stripped down and started again. So I started it again then saw it got stopped for a second time, I've waited for a long while now for this to come back and continue as I'm really excited to see where this goes again. As someone with a love of systems and idles this was right up my ally and can't wait to see this kick off again.
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the story is alright
issue (for me)
the system is not as idle as the title seem to be
and the date seems to be unnecessary considering the mc character (slow, don't want to deal with other)
as for the world building, i think its a bit grand to start from practically zero to universe.
and lastly the author comment is immersion breaking coz its too long. make it short and concise so it doesn't mix with the story
P.S. Author, please leave in the book's synopsis a Disc0rd or something to get in touch :) I would love to talk more or to know when more updates are coming.
The writing is good, some miner problem with word usage and spelling. The story is compelling and catches you up in it even though currently there are only 5 chapters.
MC is a veteran, apparently some type of special operations trooper, who has been wounded and medically retired. He has adopted the neighborhood that he lives in and appears to be seen as the "big brother" of the rough area.
Please Author-san, give us more....