Hilarious. I wish the chapter length was longer, but you can't have everything. Not much typos or grammatical errors. His insistence on dating a 3000 year old lady, I'll admit, is SLIGHTLY disturbing, but eh. I do wish he'd start cultivating in a way that makes at least a bit of sense, but I guess he really doesn't have to if it's meant to be senseless or an anything goes type of deal. I like the systems' personality, but it would probably be odd if you weren't used to systems who's goals in life seems to be to mess with the MC. 100/100, would totally eat popcorn to it again. Thx. _(ツ)_/
why can't there be a novel were the little sister character or female character isn't pampered by the MC for once I mean come on it's getting on my nerves
What happened to the novel. Why it stopped updating. It was good to read now suddenly it stopped. The character and story development was pretty great.
I have a habit of noting down Pros and Cons when I give a book review.So starting with the Pros:I definitely feel there is an interesting plot here. I was curious to see where the main storyline actually began. You have written a good summary as well. It made me want to read on to get to the actual plot of the book. I feel you have good setup for your lead character for his eventual character growth. Guy is at this worst point and struggles with his current lifestyle. It gave me the impression that he'll eventually grow out of that and I was intrigued as to find out how he would do so.Now for the cons:There are a large number of grammar and punctuation mistakes throughout your book. It was almost jarring to read some of the setences because of this. You have also used many words incorrectly. I found several instances where you have used certain words which have a completely different meaning that what you intended. I would strongly suggest to recheck your earlier chapters because the mistakes there are quite vast. Lastly, I found the first 4 chapters to be very slow. Not much happens. I understand you were trying to show the readers that Guy is living in very bad conditions but honestly, it's been dragged on way too long. I was looking forward to get to the actual plot but it was chapter after chapter of Guy hating his life. Felt unnecessary.Overall I feel the amounts of mistakes I found definitely hindered the experience for me. I do believe this story could be very interesting, judging by the summary. I wish there was more focus on the plot and less dragged out descriptions of Guy's lifestyle. I wish you all the best because you have potential for improvement. I'd really like to give it another read once you've made a couple of changes.
Good enough grammar. But please give some effort to making sure the paragraphs and conversations are formatted to be readable too.The novel description said the MC was a normal human with no power and got by with wits and determination. I was hopeful that this MC would not be another overpowered idiot.But then the MC was announced as the fiance of a queen in the third chapter which... is something else, haha...And then he defeats half a dozen knights effortlessly with a dual-wielding style he has never used before, analyzed the difference between wood and aluminum with a single glance from the bleachers of the fighting arena, and then later plans and executes a rescue operation without prior experrience, based apparently just on knowledge gleaned from TV and family stories, then goes on to defeat...well, you get the idea.Author...*cries*...your definition of 'powerless' is apparently very different from mine.I'm partial to isekai where the MC's power is just modern knowledge, but give some logical reason how the MC got that knowledge please. If any person can plan a hostage retrieval just from watching TV and listening to grandpa talk about the war years, then this reviewer hopes to learn the violin from watching lindsey sterling on youtube.The plot progression of this novel is great. There is always something to be interested in as the MC introduces the wonders of bombs to a medieval world based on magic.The growing relationships of the MC have some interest as well, though I think giving the MC actual friends rather than people he steamrolls over at the soonest opportunity would heighten interest in the world.The beginning chapters are a bit rough but the format and grammar gets better as the story progresses. Lots of action, good development.All in all, a good read. Good going author!
The two remaining stat is a bit special. CHA or charisma improves my looks and ability to interact with other people which I have no knowledge of improving. LUK or luck, on the other hand, is self-explanatory the only way to increase this is by doing something lucky, like finding a four-leaf clover and flipping a coin.
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