I Became the Head of Returners Gallery

I read only one chapter only to realize how garbage and unreadable this story is. It starts off seemingly from nowhere, or if it does specify, the grammatical mistakes makes it impossible to understand. There’s no real dialogue separations and sentences are incredibly short which makes it harder to read. I understand if it’s a new writer but cmon, reread and proof read it before you post it. This is hard to read, period. Hopefully you read this comment and learn how you can improve your writing.Sentence/Structure : 0 ; invalid, no structureStory : 0 ; invalid, story is barely readable with only few plot elements present.Grammar : -5 ; the author seems as if he/she didn’t try at all.Presentation : -10 ; the presentation is awful and characters are seemingly randomly thrown in making the already difficult to read story, more difficult to understand. Overall : -3/10This story and writing in general is fucking trash, no I’m not kidding, don’t read this ****. Please, don’t. The author needs to improve on presentation, grammar, structure and plot before he could ever receive any good comments.

This novel is great, Overall the novel was great, I recommend reading this if you have time, For translators and author, Please continue the hard work.May the god bless you.

Yeah I said I was gunna wait until 100+ chapters, but the mc's mentality is like a 10 year olds, you would think that after he has killed more than probably 100000+ monsters, he would be more idk, mature but he just keeps acting like a 13 year old. I can get some of the reactions like meeting his family after years, but I think other things are a tab bit exaggerated. Other than that the world Background was probably the best aspect. But I like that the author is replying to the comments, and is active so i'll give it a 4 star to support the novel.

This book has a lot of potential but I feel like it’s being missed due to certain issues.                 1) The characters and that includes the main characters seem to have no emotional connections.I have mentioned before how  this novel especially in relation to the main characters connection  reminds me of Rise of the Three Gods but the difference I’ve seen is that the characters have no real emotional connection to each other. Whether one is happy or sad or any other emotion the characters don’t concern themselves with this the only thing they seem to care about is ensuring that one doesn’t die besides that nothing. I believe from what I’ve read if Fang Lin and Fang Yu were able to develop and grow without each other or the connection they absolutely would not care for the others wellbeing. Wang Hao if he didn’t need them to get stronger wouldn’t care about them either. No emotional connections have been developed  leading stagnation or lack of development in the characters. 2) Wang Hao is in comparison to all the other  divine and godly divine bloodlines way overpowered even under sealed conditions and this overwhelming strength is one of the reasons where he is unable to truly connect with Fang Lin ,he  is never in a condition of vulnerability to help foster emotion connections. Even with only a few seals released he needs almost no one to truthfully help him.3) The speed of their development I’m not saying power them up super fast but I’m assuming that the person who sealed Wang Hao is simply getting stronger and Wang Hao who already seems insanely overpowered is supposedly weaker that the person to sealed him with he fact that we don’t actually know how long he’s been sealed in the coffin and how long it’s talking them to reach higher realms it seems like by the time they are powered up and Wang Hao is fully unsealed their opponent will only be more powerful besides Wang Hao is not gaining more strength as he’s unsealed he’s just returning to his initial strength so that makes it seem like getting revenge is impossible.4) As readers we like to see the main character that was seen as trash improve in status and genuine happiness as he goes further in his path but in many ways Fang Lin is more pitiful than when we actually met him. That with the completely opposite treatment of Fang Yu doesn’t make me in see her in a good light at all providing to much to light to one character just makes the readers focus more on the neglected character and could actually turn readers against Fang Yu in the long run. I mean if you have a family member and you have a good relationship with them you would tend to help them even if it’s only small things but Fang Yu from the moment she was picked up by Xiao Ya has basically gone on her own the interaction between her and Fang Lin has been solely based on cultivation needs.  In treatment of main characters in stories with multiple main characters it’s important to try and keep the treatment of each balanced or at least not so skewered to one side. I think that’s another area when Rise of the three Gods beats you in. 5) Reading the novel there are instances where  your treatment of one character is truthfully brutal almost to the point of being cruel and this does keep readers interested as we want to see that characters situations actually improve but if you keep using that as the thing to keep people reading and waiting for that can backfire as it’s basically you creating an itch for the readers that is never actually being scratched which if anyone knows anything about that feeling eventually leads to just intense rage at the book at the author at the entire story. There are lots of elements of the story that people enjoy using that to keep people reading may lead to people actually disliking the book rather that actually enjoying. Lots of us read light novels like this because we like seeing characters achieve their dreams, improve their status  and life but in ways you’ve done the exact opposite well it’s definitely original  but a novel can be original without taking out the things people genuinely loved about other novels.Well I wrote this cause the author asked me to. Maybe not what she meant when she asked but I did it and spoke honestly about what I saw as a reader. Hope you’ll take sum of my suggestions to mind or at least work on some of these areas.  This is my first ever review and probably way to long so sorry for that

I'm gonna give it 5 stars just for promotion. This book's got a nice feel to it(I think?), and it's got interesting twists. It has nice grammar and imagery too so for those who wanna take a break from fantasy, waste your time here. It's up to tastes whether your time was worth it👍👍👍

it's a good story and can i have a question author are you going to add marvel or dc just a question

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