I tired but all this girl does is cry over a boy who mistreated her and tossed her aside like trash. Then, once she sees him again, she still has feelings for him. Why do so many girls get off on being abused. Pathetic
best story 10/10 just needs some dialogue fixing and spelling mistakesalso monologues are too big and author gets distracted on each monologues but it gets better
Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
Bro I will support you man, but you gotta do a better job with the MC. He’s is a f*****g beta man. Come on you could portray him better than that. Idk if you plan on fixing his mentality as the story goes on but right now your MC is making story suck. It’s my honest opinion man. Everything else is dandy, your MC is just not cutting it.
For a transmigrated story, it has a pretty well built world and has a lot of potential. The descriptions are detailed and right in the beginning. I would suggest that since you are using an already existing character, and especially someone from the olden age, he was too understanding of high technology and that breaks character. So be mindful that he is still fighting with swords when you pulled in out of his world.
Popular Reviews