Her revenge against the Alpha

ignore i am just here to enjoy the story

Story is good, but things are way too expected and predictable, also gets boring over time, however it has been a good one, will be expecting more in the next volume.

You gave the mc the greatest background but guess what, you couldn't make him act like a ruler at all, he gets excited about an earth skill even when he was transported into a lower world. I don't know which cultivation method he uses, his prowess or any special skills. He has nothing, he just somehow became strong enough to beat some random fat dude. Then comes the grammar, it is disgusting, I would've understood if there were minor mistakes like some missing letters but, wow, can you not even use capital letters when starting a sentence or writing a name? The plural of any word in the novel is "word's" instead of "words". Huge mistakes that don't allow me to enjoy this novel.The plot is nothing new but it can be amazing... you couldn't make it so. The world backround is just you stating that there are 5 kingdons, that's all. I can't give you more than 1 star for writing quality and world backround; 3 stars for story development and character desing(which don't deserve even this much).I think you should rewrite this novel, correct your gramatical mistakes and remake the mc's personality. Good luck~

You should remove it from "Original" this is a cheap and bad copy of Douluo Dalu You should remove it from "Original" this is a cheap and bad copy of Douluo Dalu

What a fun book! The story development is great and the characters are also well formed. I like how cute their banter is 😂 It's very amusing. Great writing! I recommend reading this book!

Alright then here we go after reading 10 chaps in. The novel has a unique story with an interesting lore of the Gods, definitely a more traditional-driven fantasy but it is quite enjoyable. The dialogues of the characters and their actions shape their personalities quite well, each character is easily distinguishable from the next. However, I advise the author to use more connecting words or conjunctions. The novel doesn't seem to flow very well with single short sentences that appear detached from each other. A few minor grammar errors here and there but it does not disrupt the overall appeal of the story. But I do strongly advise to look into linking the sentences to each other as when reading, it appeared that each sentence was a new single thought that had no relation to the other. That is the only issue that is hindering the potential greatness of the novel. Overall it is a wonderful read! best of luck to the author !

"It's okay" She got closer and slowly embraced the child "Everything is going to be okay, this big sister is here"

-For their expressions I see that they do not know too much, "they" are too strong for you as they are now, a glance would be enough to kill them. If they want to survive they must tell me everything they know.