Heavenly Dao's Chosen (Old, rewriting it)

Wow This book is too great and can't be ignored.
The writing quality is soo awesome that it  hoks yiu and you barely can leave it.
The story is too interesting,  action and strong that it burns you to read on just by looking at the book cover.
Loved the plot.
Good luck author

I'm going to shamelessly give myself 5 stars. I hope you stick through the first 5 chapters at least before deciding if you like my book or not. I strive to improve my writing every chapter and I would love honest feedback.

I hope you read at least a few chapters before deciding whether you like it or not since the first few are a little bit fast paced and the conversations are not that smooth. I will try to upload at least 5 chapters a week and improve my writing quality every chapter.
Each chapter will be around 2000 words

Hi, I personally think it's a really enjoyable story!

I'm not sure how to describe it, but the jargon that you're using sets me in the world fast. Really nice stuff instead of spelling it out, haha!

By the way, how did you come up with the name Orphelia? I really like the ring to it!

Pretty awesome start. This book is so great. The plot is very interesting that it hooks you from pages to pages. I asume there will be a lot to read from this story.
Not to mention, the writing style is simply and easy understanding. Great work author

The story development looks wonderful...I took an overview and it seems nice.... everything seems so clear to understand...names of characters are no difficult to carry-on with....

First of all, if this is your first book, then it's more than great.
The structure of the paragraphs and sentences along with the good grammar and punctuation are very well taken care of.
Although I don't like cultivation novels, I really enjoyed this one. Good plot and ideas.
Everyone should really give it a try.

This book reminds me of the old cultivation novels... It's nice.

There aren't many bad points in the novel. The grammar and punctuation are both decent. Proper spacing and sentence structuring. My only issue with it is that it feels a bit rushed. The chapter lengths are good in my own opinion  but it just feels a bit rushed. Dialogue isn't a lot, and feel stiff as well...

Altogether it is very good, but would be even better if these issues addressed...