GOOD SIN: THE LEGEND OF AN ASURA

It's a good story and has more potential.
Waiting for more chapters
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Review for a read till chapter 3.

The style of writing is not really unique, childish perhaps. No real way around it besides constant writing. The review is more for aspects outside of Grammer. I hope youll stick to writing and deliver quality works in the future.

The initial chapters bored me, something a Prologue should strive to be the opposite. The story was spread too wide, many days flying by with not much going on. Its best to start off the prologue with something exciting, thrilling, something to make the readers look forward to the next chapter. The nightmare is interesting but nothing urgent or thought provoking is happening.

Character actions are simply written for the sake of it. Karma goes to school, does this, does that. There is no personality. I want to know who I am following in the story. There is a difference between 'Karma ate dinner and went to bed' vs 'Karma begrudgingly shoved a spoonful of spinach into his mouth. He swallowed it whole, an action that almost choked him to death. The taste was never pleasant. He had once blamed his mother for the taste. After many attempts of his own cooking, there was no saving it. The plant was simply never made to be eaten.'. There is a lot more personality in the latter.

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The Raw passion of the author was visible in every word. But his grasp on grammar and the writing method is what undoes his efforts. But it seems like the author is learning and improving.
But unfortunately the author needs (I don't have any authority to say this) to rewrite or revamp the novel a little bit.
Story and concept wise, it's cool and has a lot of potential, so I really hope the author succeeds in his first novel.

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It's a good book to read has good characters but Author needs to improve writing quality of book.     .......................      ...........

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