Your writing was not perfect but still understandable so it's not a big deal. U also updated regularly and I liked the idea of your world. The character design seemed well thought but the story development and your pacing still have rooms to improve. Overall, well done and good luck :)
Novel writer background is cool. Escaping from prison is also cool. the conversations about the author and escaping from prison will be hilarious.I want this to be picked. 🗿🗿🗿🗿🗿🗿🗿🗿🗿🗿🗿🗿🗿🗿🗿
Stating my review as of C51, I held the top Non-Author review on the original so please read the whole review.I would check on it daily till it finally was removed by the author himself. It was a great book that I rated 4.5 Stars for having great Writing Quality, Stable updates, Good Character Design, the only issue was the lacking story development which was due to low chapter count, and lower world background due to the main character as of then not expanding his horizons past 3 places, all described and imaginable through context, just a lack of world knowledge. This story has, in my opinion, different from the original too much for it to be considered a replacement.The Writing Quality is lower, at 3.5 stars, but I rounded to 4 due to the rating system in place. The author can't seem to stay on topic and butts in the story to explain things that need no explanation, and could if was a good author, be explained in dialogue or thought. For example, the heart cultivation system, they deviate for a minute to explain the heart cultivation system, how it's based on the soul and therefore one of the hardest things in the cultivation world to raise, and how only the 3 top immortal emperors have reached its peak.He can think back on his death while cultivating in his store," I could have caught up to him and beat him if I had raised my heart cultivation to Heart Void... I'm still stuck at Heart unmoving mountain, I may have had a glimpse into it previously but my cultivation now is simply too low
The background of this world is actually some of the best world building I've seen in a long time, because the author doesn't just say anything specific most of the time, but instead drops small hints. I can't tell where the story is going right now, although that's usually how video games go, so I suppose it makes sense. the writing quality is great, as is the update stability, although I don't have anything specific to say about that. The characters all feel like people I could meet in real life, they have real personalities, and I really am excited to see how you do character developement.
HUH ANOTHER RATE FOR MY BROSKI BRUHTASTICK...SOOOOOOO YEAH I JUST LIKE YOUR STORY ALREADY SO I GUESS I JUST GONNA RATE FOR 3 OR 4 TIME...AND BYE MY BROSKI BRUHTASTICK...B R U H . . . 😏 🦴 🤍 💜
Not a clue, just change the name to system inheritance or inherited system, also change that self drawn cover, probably turning ppl away by these two things
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