Error Of The World

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"It's not about the taste! It's about the nutrients you put in the food!" Phen's mom, Linda, said defensively.

"Wow, she looks pissed," Ren commented, surprised at the reaction. Shinobu shrugged.

Saya: "My mother was always strict, especially when it came to my education! She always punished me when I scored below 8, and when I took 10, she gave me candy ... "

"you're so mean No-eye-brow! That's big sis!" calls out Derek.

Only shooting stars break the moldSomebody once told me the world is gonna roll me

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Very interesting, I love it already!The FL is so clumsy and funny!🤍Great story author! 👍🔥

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The book itself has a lot of promise. I’ve enjoyed the chapters so far, and since the author basixally stated multiple times that it is something he/she is refining, I’ll be more mild with my early review. I really like the world building, seems very unique. I’m excited to see if there are other things/beings that can help one on the steps, which would be interesting. I reallly like the power system, it’s very unique, almost philosophical in a what. With good and bad, but not just action but intention as well( atleast that’s how i took it). Very intersting and it would be really cool to see the MC try and figure out the path without Noix (forgot the spelling) and actually have stronger understanding of the path, since that would make him more evil. Would be cool.I like the naming schemes too, kind of like the quinces in Bleach with the almost french (how I felt) or romantised language. Grammar and all of that definitely can be improved, but i’m judging on story and development that i’m seeing so far, not on writing style. I’ll keep it in my library and wait for more uploads, so let’s see how it goes.