MC seems like he is not the MC. Later on when the story develops, he turns into a huge sissy. The amount of novels i've dropped because of how the MC let people trample over him is insane. This novel is no different; it is a such a shame as the theme was really great as a newgame+ type. If only we had a #SissyMC tag.
Her uncle said he will help alina if she needs help vs the s rank intruder and nooow all of the sudden for drama, he cant help her cuz they can only help if the intruder is z. Which also makes no f sense cuz its not against other humans but f intruders who want to destroy humans like w t f. For reals are those authors even thinking, i understand some minor errors if its 100ts of chapters in but its chapter 16 and already massiv brainlagging author so frustrating cuz it happens like in every f novel.
In new worlds like no world buildign at all, world trees couldnt think about solutions a human mc can come up with in a span of couple hours.
how did this get 4,5 stars i will never understand rly 1 of th worst novels.
Great story
I feel it has a lot of potential but if I had one problem with it is that it never feels serious to me. even when the MC and friends are in a dangerous situation it feels really light hearted and cheerful and I can’t take it seriously it’s a shame too cause there are some parts that have great impact but are just blown over by ether the gags or the bloody fairy it doesn’t help that there are entire chapters that consist purely with jokes this is more apparent in volume 2 when everyone has settled in
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There are quite a few... negatives, should we say, to this story. I'm not saying it's intrinsically bad but by stating you think the quality is there, you've opened up a can of worms. I think you've got a solid base but you need an editor and some quality time thinking over your work. I've only read the first chapter and I'm bothered by it's foundation.
Most of your world background is going to come from the places your character travels to and as well, we don't have any background at first at all, even in the first chapter, on the world that the MC leaves behind.
Your character design is too bland for my tastes. A character called Alex, the hero of heroes with a system, it seems too Mary Sue. At least you've made him younger, that gives him room to grow. I like that idea.
The overall quality is a little subpar. I mean, it's 100 times better than most xinxia novels on this platform simply because the content is actually digestable but it could use some work. I'd suggest running over it and ironing out the kinks, for instance the constant use of the characters name. You can call him 'Alex' or use his last name, use the word boy, youth, teenager, or just not need to include his name at all.
Your updates are regular, that's fantastic, I'll give you that.
Overall, it's a solid novel but you have a rocky foundation. Whilst I haven't read past the first chapter, I can see the allure of the novel.
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In new worlds like no world buildign at all, world trees couldnt think about solutions a human mc can come up with in a span of couple hours.
how did this get 4,5 stars i will never understand rly 1 of th worst novels.
I feel it has a lot of potential but if I had one problem with it is that it never feels serious to me. even when the MC and friends are in a dangerous situation it feels really light hearted and cheerful and I can’t take it seriously it’s a shame too cause there are some parts that have great impact but are just blown over by ether the gags or the bloody fairy it doesn’t help that there are entire chapters that consist purely with jokes this is more apparent in volume 2 when everyone has settled in
Most of your world background is going to come from the places your character travels to and as well, we don't have any background at first at all, even in the first chapter, on the world that the MC leaves behind.
Your character design is too bland for my tastes. A character called Alex, the hero of heroes with a system, it seems too Mary Sue. At least you've made him younger, that gives him room to grow. I like that idea.
The overall quality is a little subpar. I mean, it's 100 times better than most xinxia novels on this platform simply because the content is actually digestable but it could use some work. I'd suggest running over it and ironing out the kinks, for instance the constant use of the characters name. You can call him 'Alex' or use his last name, use the word boy, youth, teenager, or just not need to include his name at all.
Your updates are regular, that's fantastic, I'll give you that.
Overall, it's a solid novel but you have a rocky foundation. Whilst I haven't read past the first chapter, I can see the allure of the novel.
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