I really loved reading this story! The characters and world building are some of the best I've seen in this genre. Unfortunately I read the whole thing in a week and the last update was over a month ago. Hopefully updates pick up a bit.
I'm on chapter 3, and boy is this story doing a number on me. I normally don't read stories involving systems, but this one caught my attention and interest. I like the character and how it started. The descriptions and the characters feel real. The world is very well constructed, you deserve five stars for that! And your stability of updates, you gotta teach me how to update like that man! My only complaint is, the grammar and the punctuation. It's good but it can always be better. And be sure to capitalize the start of every line!
The story is slow-paced and there are some mistakes here and there but overall, The plot is quite fascinating. The MC is not your average childish or righteous but is quite smart and adaptable to his situation. The side characters are also well-written. The mysteries surrounding the world make it more interesting. The battle scenes are average but could be improved. In my opinion, If the Author doesn't mess up too much, It has the potential to become a gem. Good Luck
My brother Rick came up from beside me and punched me. I punched him back, I wasn't in the mood for play fighting. As always we were almost late. I entered Cress middle school and I see Jenny with her friends at a side of a building. I didn't make eye contact, I don't know what to say to her... 'How should I tell her' I thought to myself. I didn't know what to do but I can't be with her
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