The theme is good but are u for real a two year old going and killing, okey i understand its cultivation they develop faster no big deal , but oh boy the writing is terrible. Like a good third of sentances are butcherd and dont make any sense. I forced myself to get to premium chapters in hope author got sober but it just got worse. If this novel gets edited to look like some decent art u can coment soo i come back becose as I said the theme is interesting but before that i hope i can forget what I have read.
Hello, Humble Author of this novel (See how I didn't give myself a 5 star?... very humble!).Thanks to everyone taking the time to read my story. If you enjoy it and want to help me make it better, I'd appreciate letting me know about any mistakes in grammar or inconsistencies.This is my first novel and English isn't my main language so please go easy on me lol.There are quite a few obvious tropes but it's bound to be like that since I write stories that I enjoy reading...I will release bulk chapters in the beginning however at around chapter 20, it will become one per day as that would catch up to my writing speed.
Great story, bro! I've really enjoyed it from the very first chapter to the latest one. You've got something special here. However, I have a suggestion: consider drawing inspiration from Japanese sports manga and anime, especially when it comes to adding emotional depth. Series like Diamond no Ace or Haikyuu!! excel at incorporating sad or challenging moments without diving too deep into dark themes. Right now, it feels like you're introducing some really heavy, dark elements that don't quite fit the tone of a sports story, which should be more about youth, energy, and the spirit of competition.It's totally fine to have the main character face struggles on their journey to the top, but there are more fitting ways to explore those setbacks without turning every 50 chapters into a tragedy. You’re crafting an excellent story, and I truly believe it could be even better if you lightened up on the darker elements.I love your work, and I genuinely appreciate your storytelling. I just wanted to share my thoughts because I think your story has the potential to be even more enjoyable. Keep up the great work
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
This novel is inadequate. Besides the undefined system and the completely stupid actions of the MC, there is also the total lack of common sense everyone has.Example, finding a person by the vague description of his face, when the one describing is a normal human and it had been outside any civilization during the deepest of dark nights in the middle of nowhere. It is not like the human was running away from danger, no she must have had a torch to shine on the MC face to memorize it.She also went back home so the boss of her now dead pursuers could find her easily.Do not waste your time with this.
THIS BOOK IS JUST AMAZING! AUTHOR, I REALLY REALLY SUPER LOVE YOUR BOOK! It’s great! No wonder why it has many reviews! Keep up the great work, author! I’m rooting for you! Ahhhhh i’m so excited!
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