Clearing The World That's Inside A Novel

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it's not bad. I got to chapter 9. But the MC has so many misunderstandings about the world and is overly dense. It takes away from enjoying the story.

Ridiculously childish character and the story is very poorly written. At least attempt to learn the language you want to write in before publishing. I'm fairly certain the author has never touched a woman, and it is really reflected in the way he writes; it's mostly logic straight out of bad hentai.As for the people complaining about r.a.p.e, well, just look a Greek mythology. A God of Lust would not necessarily be beneath such things.

Everything is good so far. I like the characters and writing style. Grammar is also good  right now. Good luck on working hard.                                            I think real start starts from the chapter 'Death'.            

Ok let's start by say that this book is a epic read. HANDS DOWN.  You need to read this novel. The author  has given  us an idea of what would happen  if master chief from the halo games crash landed on a dungeon and dragons world. And the impact that he has as he goes about survival. Between  the hurmous  interactions between  a born and bred war machine   and the world.. You need to read  this and beg the author  for more'

Wild megane-ojisan spotted! It used Review! It's super effective! Hey, it's a sci-fi fanfic which actually got me hankering to play the game it's based on lol. That, in itself, speaks volumes about the work.The work you put in with introducing the overall setting and lore is worthy of applause. And the fanfic itself is engaging enough. The grammar is good. It just has some hiccups occasionally, but not enough to detract from the reading experience.All in all, a stellar read. Great job!

This is really a good novel. I like everything: good story plot, characters and their potential development. I am looking forward for more updates. Also, I will definitely recommend to everyone to read this novel.

Danzo just placed his head down and thought quietly. Never in his dreams did he think this would all come crashing down already. If he knew that this man had such information on him. He would have taken the deal and rethought his plans. If the Root members were not out on assignment he would have rested more.