Chasing Fate (Sentinel & Guide)

Natal - Ara?

"The Queen of Hearts has disappeared, and the king had sent most of his soldiers to deal with the trouble in the east whilst sending some of the remaining ones in search parties for the queen. The citizens are in unease due to the very little security left to protect the kingdom and the disappearance of their beloved queen, voicing out their opinions to call back some of the troops in which the king had ignored. Thus, the dangers and threats within and outside of the kingdom had increased. A foolish king, they said."

After the woman pulled me aside, her face began to look somewhat familiar. It reminded me of a famous ballerina, but I couldn't tell.

{Elaine 210,000}

Far away, Alex had his eyes closed as he put all of his focus into his chastiefol.

Kimj please take good care of my daughter ok.

Her service records reflect that, her main focus in the academy was all about diplomacy, language and culture studies of different planets.

"Our leader wishes to speak with yours to find out your punishment," another tall man butted in.

Meanwhile, Irina and I were walking hand-in-hand toward the park that wasn't too far away.

The MC is not edge lord and thank god it is not a system novel. Book is good. Atleast Give it a try before passing judgement. My first issue is pacing. The pacing is too fast paced and stabilized somewhere around 50 chapters. Hope author continues it that way otherwise it feels like watching a YouTube video on 4x speed. Second issue is main characters are training day in and day out. There is not enough break. From readers POV it would too overwhelming as they are productive every chapter posted. To offside it, show how MC and similar are interacting like going outside doing something entertaining etc. it kinda takes readers mind off but the transition should be organic. MC is becoming too OP too fast. Even without system cheats MC is becoming OP too fast. Better make the MC settle for sometime and make readers adjusted. Naruto is a story which takes more chapters to fully explore. So it is best if author takes it slow and explores more. Author specific:- If you are serious about writing this fic, Try to look in reddit sub threads for novels with high intense fight narration. It might help writing more flushed out fight scenes. Fight scenes are the bread and butter of Naruto fic. The story premise would be same for all the thousands of fics but if you want your fic to stand out you need to bring in more to the table. Overall it is 4 out of 5. Let me know about the criticism author if you have read the review.

A truly great book, absolutely not to be missed. My friend, you deserve this praise. Everything is so perfect, it reminds me of the emotions I felt when I first started reading novels. It's simply wonderful.

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