Bonnie's Touch

It's got good main characters, but I think it suffers too much from the intentional "evil world" design.What I mean is that everyone everywhere are just greedy monsters who strive for power and kill millions of others for shits and giggles.Also most if not all characters somewhat relevant to the story all build their power in some way by using randoms as food for their cultivation.This creates a problem in my opinion since the "MC faction" can't really have greedy power hungry mindless villains as friends, but instead needs to find "unique" people or simply mind-control subordinates.This in turn creates a problem where everyone is mindless and the story predictable except for when the main crew does something smart.Another problem I have is the use of ridiculously excessive numbers such as billions, trillions etc. They are numbers too big for a human mind to even understand the implications of. It's common to use in Xianxia for some reason, but I find it annoying to read as the implication of "billion" becomes a "trivial" thing to the story, making it seem not special whatsoever. Using 10 thousand instead would be a number one could picture in their head and still seem very impressive."Slaughtering a trillion people in an instant" > ...Uhh okay?"Slaughtering a city of 10 thousand people in just a few hours" > You pretty much see the bloodbath taking place.The story isn't bad though, and DPs writing quality is good, as it was in his other works.

My first time reading a novel like this. I enjoyed it a lot. Very detailed with character build up and the world its staged around. Gets you very engaged from the beginning. I find myself wondering what will the characters do next and how it will impact their situation.  Great read!😊

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we'll all I can say is that... Its's Well Made Story. I love the characters, the Story Plot. So Author please pretty please—update this story please

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Finally at 04 September 2018. The Novel completed its first Volume. Thank you reader for the love, support, and feedback.Volume 2 is coming. It is more about his adventure while readers could see the country slightly better. He would start to visit other cities, the 'dungeon', and 'battle' difficult children of Gods. Meeting new friends and foes along the way. He would also grow, but only slightly. Gwahahaha.

Wait. I’m I allowed to review my own story? I’m already writing one so too late now! Paramnesia is a story I started working on about a year and a half ago. Back then, I originally planned to draw a comic for this story. Which is why the first few chapters were kinda off, I had a bit of trouble turning a comic into a novel. Btw, if you look closely at the cover you’ll see the words ‘pathway to another world’ under the title, that’s because that was the original name of this story and that cover was from a long time ago so it still had that title. If anyone is curious, here’s the dictionary definition of Paramnesia. par·am·ne·sia ˌperamˈnēZH(ē)noun PSYCHIATRYa condition or phenomenon involving distorted memory or confusions of fact and fantasy, such as confabulation or déjà vu.I like using names that have meanings so if you want to know mean about the characters personalities you could search up their names. The only characters who are named after real people are the male and female main characters. Wow! This was probably longer than my chapters! Thanks for reading!

I wanna say that I really really like this story and I definitely want to keep up with reading it. There were points where you made my toes and fingers curl because I could just feel the pain. However, that pain that I felt didn't come from how you described it, it came from prior works that properly described the same things. Mentioning that it happened, I was able to recall on those past works that I had read. I don't feel that they are in pain and I don't feel that they're afraid other than you've said that they are. I think that for a series like this, emotions are very very important to portray correctly and I think that's definitely something you should work on. For example, you could have described her thumb being dislocated much better, and given a bit of detail to the beginning of one of their limbs being cut off without going into the whole thing. By the time you got to the part of how they were laying there with missing toes and fingers and they were bloodied and naked, I didn't really feel any of it and I should. I should be pitying them, and I should feel for them.Also, you wrote that the kidnappers wanted Zach to make out with Odette but he hesitates and this didn't really make sense to me. When he's so afraid like you said, and the two of them have been middle school sweethearts, they're already talking marriage - making out should be nothing at this stage in their relationship. When I was in middle school, we were all already making out with our boyfriends. Maybe it's a cultural thing, maybe they're more conservative, but if that's the case I think that you should make that clear. Otherwise it was really shocking that he didn't just do something that most couples do comfortably out in public. As for world background and character design, I feel like you didn't describe anything regarding these two things. I don't have much of an idea of what Zach and Odette look like other than their clothes during the 3rd regression. I'd like to see you expand on these things in the future.I'm going to keep reading because I still really like the plot and I want to know where it goes, but I would love to see you improve on these things. If you did that this book would be close to perfect.