You need to improve your grammar as it really ruins the story. The character is way too open with his abilities and your transitions aren't the smoothest. The story is alright but you should probably lay out more information about the current world the MC lives in.
First time bothering to rate a novel on this website, so far the story is great but the only thing that’s bringing it down is the story lacks explanations like what's body tempering pearl, why did he get sealed, why and how he got body tempering materials so easily in a cruel cultivation world, the character accepted it without asking/thinking about why he got sealed and how does he know how to unseal his meridians and idk how to fully explain it but the story needs background info, it only says he is 4 and he gets sealed after his test but nothing about where he came from..... I can add more stuff but I think you get the point. As long as these stuff get added in the story will be perfect. Edit: that was a comment before i saw the stat numbers -_- too unreasonable like I Eat Tomatoes novels except it starts at the beginning of the story, initially i gave it a high rating but lowered it because of this but i still think the story has potential if the author is reasonable with how op the main character is, the stats might be reasonable at the end of the novels but not at the beginning of the story unless the author just uses big numbers but it doesn't equal to that much power, but still if that were the case the numbers are just crazy. One of the main reason i read cultivation novel is because i want to see character progression and adventure. I like the bloodline and transformation idea would be nice if the author makes the transformation actually his main body since there are too many novels out there that use transformation as superficial cultivation technique and at the end human body strength is greater than the transformation version. I am still going to read on and see if things improve or the author can make things work with how things are and change my rating based on that. Overall you just gotta make the power system more meaning full rather than just too op and need more background detail, and hopefully the story doesn't focus on women too much because i often see author use that as an excuse to make a ton of filler chapters. I know author is 13 and you already have a great framework for a very great story but the author still has a lot of learn, and don't take offence but this is my honest opinion after reading 100+ cultivation novel. If you can fix and incorporate everything i said using the same idea that you already have then this will be in my top 5 novel list. You also have to know that after reading all these novels now days most novel feel too repetitive to me and the only reason i am writing this comment is because this doesn't. So i hope you improve your story and before all this i hope the story doesn't get dropped which usually tend to happen. I think your story has similarities with 'Warlock of the Magus World' so might want to check that out and 'Swallowed Star'. Swallowed Star author also tends to use big numbers like you so by the time you finish his novel you will be annoyed to look at numbers, they loose their value... and he also tends to ruin the story at the end in all of his novel by getting rid of their uniqueness like bloodlines/special power and stuff.
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Bad grammar but not to the point of being unreadable. Good ideas for the erotic contents that cover various fetishes, but they're told in a way which is lack in details. As a result, readers can't get immersed enough to fully enjoy it.
I Really love it, continue writing this novel please ♥, but there is a lot of things that I don't really understand but it's ok------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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