Beyond the Lucid Veil

Welp, hello traveler. I welcome you to my first novel. I'm doing my absolute best to be consistent and I'm constantly improving( or so I hope... )

This novel, is my first experiment, and if you can bear with my first 2 chapters , you might even enjoy your time.

I have this first arc drawn out, and I think it might even be kinda good...

Also, if you care... could you tell me why you stopped by, or why my book captivated you enough to click on it? this would just help me understand what yall want!

lots of love for checking me out❤🙏

The story is quite intriguing, and it’s definitely got me hooked. Chapter 4 was my favorite; the flow was amazing, and the steady rise in action had me craving more! I’d love to see this story fleshed out character-wise and setting-wise, but I guess we’ll find out more the farther we go!

It's a good framework for a story, if not a little goofy

Pros:
- Very descriptive writing, I can picture it like an anime in my head
- First chapter has an interesting hook
- Character designs (when they are described) are cool, like the boy in chapter 3
Cons:
- The chapters seem quite disconnected from each other (but maybe you have plans to tie them together in the future?)
- The random romance in chapter 2 seems a little unnecessary
- Reads like a creepypasta at some points

This shit is crazy like totally a type of book which i would love to read ngl.

I hate unfinished books. This is a good one but I'll probably never finish it cause I lose interest cause it takes forever for them to continue.