Tl:DR "meh". Solid C-.Let me preface this review by stating the obvious: "THIS NOVEL DESPERATELY NEEDS AN EDITOR". now that that is out of the way I will continue.The bad: poor grammar, poor capitalisation / punctuation (often none, at all) and comically long run on sentences (I think I saw one paragraph long sentence with 6 "and"s in it back around chapter 10). The author is overly reliant on Autocowrong and it shows. How the novel flows would suggest that the author is not a native English speaker, and if that is the case then kudos for your effort friend, but you need an editor.There is a gaming term called Ludonarrative Dissonance, which describes the disconnect between a games narrative (the story) and the gameplay. In this work the author creates a similar dissonance by introducing a "genius scientist" which is overly reliant on his system and fails to have a single original thought. The overly ****** dialogue compounds this. It is hard to convince readers that your MC is a genius when he speaks in either short and choppy or long run on sentences.The meh: what could be fantastic fight chapters and power gains are glossed over instead of expanded on. The lack of detail transforms the elements which this genre typically does best into fluff; glossed over and quickly forgotten.The good: all the things which make this genre great are present; there is a solid foundation to build on.Closing thoughts: please, please... find an editor.
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Read through 50 Chapters in 2 days. It's really good, maybe wait for more chapters to accumulate tho? Basic Transmigration, but instead of an OP MC we get OP Sidecharacter who is railroaded by the system into fighting all those protagonists and antagonists from the novels we know and hate.Dude just wants to chill out and sleep with all the females, but other people have plans for him, so he is forced to become stronger while trying to survive/keep true to himself.One important thing about this is: The MC is smart.As in. Thinks ahead, never let's a clue unchecked, gathers information type thing. First 5-10 chapters are painful because he is still adapting to a new world and getting his bearings, but from then on this is a really good read.I consider this a hidden gem in the trashheap of R-18 stories.
the story is good but really needs some refining lots of errors like the usual he suppose to be she and she suppose to be he then there are multiple names for each person and location so becomes harder to realize whose talking or what area they are in as it simply changes then there's the repeat of words like if i were to say "how are you" filling up the whole paragraph with that one part up to 50-70 times before moving on to the story
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