All around this story is average. It's a cultivation novel with typical cliches and a few typical features, but I haven't seen anything new yet. Sometimes that's good, because you just want to have an enjoyable read, and indeed some people love how "fast paced" the novel is, but not me.
The grammar is near flawless but the author's command of the English language is lacking. Moments seem to drag on forever and the writing seems to circle itself in a repetitive manner. These things happen mostly due to a bland, unvarried word choice. For readers like me, with higher expectations, I'm simply bored from reading it.
Plot-wise the story is average too. The world building doesnt seem very deep and there aren't very many characters, as if the author doesnt want to put the work in to making a large world. The time period and cultures aren't established (with either the use of objects, technology, or references). Nothing.
Furthermore the magic system is lacking. Even by chapter 30, when the MC has broken through two planes, I still dont know what the planes are, what the consequences of cultivating improperly are, what the elements are, or how the elements are used (in combat) ect. Even by chapter 30 there has been only one fight and it was totally lackluster. Missed opportunity for demonstrating the magic system in action.
Over all I would say average. I am still very impressed with the grammar, but there's unfortunately no character or charm to the writing. So even though it isn't distracting from the story, it is still detracting. Author should go back to rework scenes and actively use synonyms. Every adjective in a chapter should be unique. Every verb should be specifically chosen to best describe an action.
If you're reading this, then I do hope you try out the book. I cannot say the early chapters are my best work, but it is my first book so do give it a try if you are willing to give this book a chance and allow me to entertain you.
I feel like this could be a gem if the author plays his cards right.
Characters are fun, stability of updates is great, but the writing can be chaotic sometimes to the point that I don't really know what's going on.
Especially during POV changes.
But hey nobody is perfect, right? So dear author I would recommend getting an editor because this novel has a LOT of potential and chaotic writing may scare potential readers away.
Much love! ♥
Very basic beginning, but that's fine. What isn't is the Gary Sue MC who has no emotional baggage despite being traumatized at 12, constantly bullied, and oh, trains with no goal or motivation, not even sadness or to escape from his predicament. You know the guy who at 15 looks all muscular because his parent casually mentioned excercise once, the guy who never hurts anyone because "good guy is lawful good, not hormonal teenager," and of course, is always upbeat.
Well, I am a fan of Cultivation novels; So, I just got struck into it as I saw its genre♥️
To be honest- The plot the novel bears has great potential and intriguity
Writing Quality: There isn't much to complain about.
Character Design: It's okay imo
World Background: It's good also.
Update Stability: 1 chapter a day.
Story Development: Going at a good pace currently, again imo
My Rating: 4 stars, but I'll give the author a 4.6 stars rating to encourage him.
Recommendation: I'll advise you read it as it is a great story imo. Also if the first chapters are disappointing to you, I suggest you read till about chapter 40 before you decide if you want to drop it.
The first chapters aren't really that good imo, but the book started getting better for me at about chapter 30 or so. Also there are some places I personally feel the author didn't execute properly, but since he's new, I'll give him the benefit of the doubt.
If you check my write up you'll see I put imo in most of the places because they are my opinions. My thoughts are different from what you'll think about the book.
I loved the book and its world-building. I had high praise for it in the earlier chapters, however, it got repetitive. It has a lot, and I mean A LOT, of tournaments with different formats but similar premises. I found it tolerable when I was still binging the book and even found it interesting. But when I caught up to the latest chapters and the plot's progress hints at the same premise, it gets frustrating.
Additionally, the updates became 2 chapters every 3-4 days. This became a deal breaker for me since I subscribed to the book's privileged chapters. No announcement was made about these delays. I understand that there might be some unforeseen circumstances but a head's up would be appreciated since it has been a few weeks.
author hi thank you for this novel and I like it but is it normal that it is so much to filler with the last chapters one has the impression that it does not advance at all the novel is cool but if there was less filler it would be more interesting
I'm fan of cultivation novel, this is one of the good so far I've read. The story has so much potential. Currently I'm at chap.150 and I wanted give few advice if author don't mind .
1. I noticed you skipping 90% of fight just by announcing the result. IMO it'll be more entertaining if add how he defeated hus opponent or how he was defeated in a fight.
2. In important fights even try to the give description of the technique, stance how the weapon look like etc
3. Add more detail while describing character because it help us imagine the in head. Like what their height how their figure ( silm, skiny, well bulit etc) how the look like, what they're waring etc.
4. If you can then give us a auxiliary chapter regarding details of cultivation realm, like the name of the initial level, grades of alchemist and formation master, also level of the alchemy item (Pill, Potion), array level, weapon grade etc.
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The grammar is near flawless but the author's command of the English language is lacking. Moments seem to drag on forever and the writing seems to circle itself in a repetitive manner. These things happen mostly due to a bland, unvarried word choice. For readers like me, with higher expectations, I'm simply bored from reading it.
Plot-wise the story is average too. The world building doesnt seem very deep and there aren't very many characters, as if the author doesnt want to put the work in to making a large world. The time period and cultures aren't established (with either the use of objects, technology, or references). Nothing.
Furthermore the magic system is lacking. Even by chapter 30, when the MC has broken through two planes, I still dont know what the planes are, what the consequences of cultivating improperly are, what the elements are, or how the elements are used (in combat) ect. Even by chapter 30 there has been only one fight and it was totally lackluster. Missed opportunity for demonstrating the magic system in action.
Over all I would say average. I am still very impressed with the grammar, but there's unfortunately no character or charm to the writing. So even though it isn't distracting from the story, it is still detracting. Author should go back to rework scenes and actively use synonyms. Every adjective in a chapter should be unique. Every verb should be specifically chosen to best describe an action.
If you're reading this, then I do hope you try out the book. I cannot say the early chapters are my best work, but it is my first book so do give it a try if you are willing to give this book a chance and allow me to entertain you.
Characters are fun, stability of updates is great, but the writing can be chaotic sometimes to the point that I don't really know what's going on.
Especially during POV changes.
But hey nobody is perfect, right? So dear author I would recommend getting an editor because this novel has a LOT of potential and chaotic writing may scare potential readers away.
Much love! ♥
To be honest- The plot the novel bears has great potential and intriguity
Writing Quality: There isn't much to complain about.
Character Design: It's okay imo
World Background: It's good also.
Update Stability: 1 chapter a day.
Story Development: Going at a good pace currently, again imo
My Rating: 4 stars, but I'll give the author a 4.6 stars rating to encourage him.
Recommendation: I'll advise you read it as it is a great story imo. Also if the first chapters are disappointing to you, I suggest you read till about chapter 40 before you decide if you want to drop it.
The first chapters aren't really that good imo, but the book started getting better for me at about chapter 30 or so. Also there are some places I personally feel the author didn't execute properly, but since he's new, I'll give him the benefit of the doubt.
If you check my write up you'll see I put imo in most of the places because they are my opinions. My thoughts are different from what you'll think about the book.
Read it... Only then will you know if it's good.
I loved the book and its world-building. I had high praise for it in the earlier chapters, however, it got repetitive. It has a lot, and I mean A LOT, of tournaments with different formats but similar premises. I found it tolerable when I was still binging the book and even found it interesting. But when I caught up to the latest chapters and the plot's progress hints at the same premise, it gets frustrating.
Additionally, the updates became 2 chapters every 3-4 days. This became a deal breaker for me since I subscribed to the book's privileged chapters. No announcement was made about these delays. I understand that there might be some unforeseen circumstances but a head's up would be appreciated since it has been a few weeks.
1. I noticed you skipping 90% of fight just by announcing the result. IMO it'll be more entertaining if add how he defeated hus opponent or how he was defeated in a fight.
2. In important fights even try to the give description of the technique, stance how the weapon look like etc
3. Add more detail while describing character because it help us imagine the in head. Like what their height how their figure ( silm, skiny, well bulit etc) how the look like, what they're waring etc.
4. If you can then give us a auxiliary chapter regarding details of cultivation realm, like the name of the initial level, grades of alchemist and formation master, also level of the alchemy item (Pill, Potion), array level, weapon grade etc.
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