I still have a lot to improve, but I have finally completed the 1st season of Academia of Stell and Spell, even if I had to change some parts of the story, from the original storyline and I think I did an excellent job.
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Haven't quite read all of the chapters yet, but I am enjoying this so far!
The Good: We have a unique story and world, and I personally love Mecha! The ensemble of characters is varied without everyone just being completely reliant on the MC. I am pleasantly surprised at how good the grammar is for a first novel.
The Bad: Some chapters are completely in bold, others are not. We have a unique world with a lot of characters, but most of them are missing details, and so is the world. The plot feels rushed, and some of the character relationships are forced without any sort of history to back them up aside from the implied friendship of Ryker and Lyra. Basically, stating their teamwork would be unbeatable after assembling a team half a chapter ago is really hard to swallow.
The Neutral: We're missing so many details, but this is your first novel and will be a good experience! Personally, I would like to see more of the world. What is the academy? What is the power source of magic? Why does everyone seem to know about the Shadow Games? I get that you have a story in your head and want to share it with others because you think they will enjoy it too. This is great! Just try and remember that we can only perceive what you show us. If you have the MC and his new teammates become best friends within half a chapter, it is possible, but show us. Lastly, the chapters get automatically numbered, so if the 1.5 chapter is like a glossary of sorts, put it in its own auxiliary volume and remove the chapter # from the titles so we don't keep reading things like "Chapter 14: Chapter 12: Tactical Training"
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The Good: We have a unique story and world, and I personally love Mecha! The ensemble of characters is varied without everyone just being completely reliant on the MC. I am pleasantly surprised at how good the grammar is for a first novel.
The Bad: Some chapters are completely in bold, others are not. We have a unique world with a lot of characters, but most of them are missing details, and so is the world. The plot feels rushed, and some of the character relationships are forced without any sort of history to back them up aside from the implied friendship of Ryker and Lyra. Basically, stating their teamwork would be unbeatable after assembling a team half a chapter ago is really hard to swallow.
The Neutral: We're missing so many details, but this is your first novel and will be a good experience! Personally, I would like to see more of the world. What is the academy? What is the power source of magic? Why does everyone seem to know about the Shadow Games? I get that you have a story in your head and want to share it with others because you think they will enjoy it too. This is great! Just try and remember that we can only perceive what you show us. If you have the MC and his new teammates become best friends within half a chapter, it is possible, but show us. Lastly, the chapters get automatically numbered, so if the 1.5 chapter is like a glossary of sorts, put it in its own auxiliary volume and remove the chapter # from the titles so we don't keep reading things like "Chapter 14: Chapter 12: Tactical Training"
This is my first Novel, hope you'll like it.