A Returnee Wants to Play VRMMO

And again what is with the manditory 140 characters for a review. The book has been great so far and is quite intersesting. (Seriously 140 characters)

Just
Really cringy
MC is a card board
Every one is a card board

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The story is amazing and i love it ...................
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Good story!!!!

This book is absolutely amazing it's well-thought-out and it honestly intrigues me about his past and what his present and future would be like from now on oh and does he have kids.
I think this book can go a long way and that is very worthy of being published and I only read a dozen chapters starting to have the urge to binge and I'm going to end up being caught up with the releases and but then I'm going to be like noooooooo~

Overall it's pretty decent, with fun and likable characters and a somewhat interesting world. Though the dialogue feels bad since they talk exposition most of the time, it is still an enjoyable read.

There are a few issues with the writing, as there are sometimes missing or misplaced commas, periods, apostrophes, and etc. Along with some missing words.

Though it's not a big deal as I can still understand it, it does ruin the flow and takes you out of the book.

I recommend using grammarly and a bit of proofreading.

Possibly the best original books on this site in my opinion, it has a very interesting premise and good execution, however there are some parts that could be made better, for me the format of quotes are sometimes hard to read.

The content is enjoyable but sometimes a bit weird, mc returns from fantasy world, sure. But how the hell did the original world gets copy of the fantasy world, while it may not be an exact copy it is on a thin line. I may have possibly read wrong on that tho. Also there seems to be a bit too many beauties already, I think it was 4 by now, to be honest it is a very common trope in novels and I thought this novel would go a bit differently but not so far so ~~ eh.

That’s about all I could find wrong with it, wait I would think that this story requires some planing so it would take longer to write with it’s weird/different plot, it already shows. Yeah that’s about all, if your looking for a fresh breath into the vrmmorpg genre this is possibly the best choice in this platform.

This shizz real good. But i see a problem with world building in earth. My solution to that is let nexus train eddie even if it's just a glimpse every arc from eddies perspective. Just so we understand more about the current earth.