Not very interesting in the first twenty chapters. No real dream training, very non specific system, leveling etc. Characters are ok, a little bit flat but it is only 20 chapters in . But there something missing if this was a meal it would be a small salad instead of a nice full course.
Probably one of the most disappointing Main characters in WN's history. I read until the end but I can't understand MC's character. Sometimes I wondered I read different stories.Too much cockblocking. Author's writing style very difficult to read at first . I am not telling about Grammar but about his style. He used a lot of ' jokes that are not funny '. Most of the tags are misleading and I am going to drop them because this is not my cup of tea.
the setting of the story is simply flawless and I like the way you write the tone of your story . but there are some flaws likerepeatationsome grammar mistakes also you should give the clear idea what is actually happening in the first chapter. web novel readers aren't patient enough to read for too muchyou should start simple and end with complex text
Three hours later after his hand was stitched up under the watchful eye of an obviously disapproving Cécile Suzaku was ushered into the viceroy's office once more. It was his second time seeing the place and he noted the changes. A lot more papers were on the Princess' desk now, along with several shelves packed with books. This was truly becoming a place of work for the viceroy.
"No, I will only do this," He appeared behind Crayne and his right arm seemed to faded into a frame of his arm and then plunged into Crayne's back. He roared in pain but couldn't fight back. Simeon ripped out a frame heart from his back and then his hand returned to normal and Crayne's body became human once more, "Now we return to our world, Crayne," Simeon crushed the heart and the bits faded into nothingness.
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