Your writing was not perfect but still understandable so it's not a big deal. U also updated regularly and I liked the idea of your world. The character design seemed well thought but the story development and your pacing still have rooms to improve. Overall, well done and good luck :)
A decent story.There may be some problems but it is enjoyable.Its a harem story and yes author is trying to give the girls personalities. Story depth is ok not too shallow.Its not a masterpiece but its enjoyable to read.
Meh. Too boring, naive and insipid to continue reading. The hero and his life are poorly revealed, sometimes not realistic. From the beginning of the beta-test a line of cheats begins and- No, this is too stereotyped to continue reading.
I come here every once in a while, just out of pure curiosity or perhaps out of nostalgia, to see whether this story is being continued or not.I am disappointed each time and left to ponder on what is next. Maybe when I build up the courage and have the inspiration, I'll pick it up, where the author left off. Or perhaps something new. Who knows.Maybe, but only time will tell. Until then, till my next visit. Regards.
I like the world building, also, your main character is interesting. He seems funny too. Also I Advocate for anyone who loves to eat to their heart's content. keep it up 😁👍
The text itself commonly (at least one per chapter) has bizarre spelling errors, but they're pretty isolated and don't impede reading the actual story too much.The story is fun, lighthearted, and a joy to read.
"Excellent!" Master Egor's voice boomed, he then turned to his son and commanded "Get everyone ready! This time we will definitely let Maria know what real power is!"
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