The Head Masters Son

First, I have read the novel...up to chapter 229 actually, I only created this account to write this review because I cannot remember my other one's password and do not have access to it at this time. First, I will say that you had a great story going for the first 200 chapters or so. Then, you decided that the mc needed a "bump" in the road. I'm all for that, but not when the "bump" destroys literally all 200 chapters before it. LIterally, undead legion...gone...endgame villain...gone...gods we have never heard of or been hinted at...here? I feel that was a poorly planned bump and I feel no motivation to read after he lost the king, the abyssal knights, his original goal, his boyz, everything. At first I thought he would get it back, but then in chapter 213-215 suddenly Zoe isn't even the main love interest anymore. Vanessa, who was only mentioned like twice, is suddenly who he seems to like because he is too stupid to realize Zoe likes him. Nobody is that dumb...come on. Then Mercy even becomes one too? Really? The interesting love interest built up masterfully for 200 chapters no longer seem so to matter. His work is all gone....I'm sorry but even if he gets everything back it will feel fake. A bump is good, but if it destroys everything before it then it was not well done. Sorry but I'm gonna have to quit reading, please enjoy your passion and continue your work.

Water. Water. One water.20% plot. 80% of the descriptions. This is not a novel. This is a game guide. The most detailed, which devotes entire chapters to a superficial description of the class. And then another chapter, which describes a part of the class skills. But this is only the beginning of suffering. Describe skills, classes, battle systems ............... and do not show in the plot. Describe the skills and class, but in the plot show through 100-150 chapters this, of course, without forgetting 2-3 chapters to repeat the previous descriptions.The main minus of the novel is that the author makes a guide to the game, not a novel.  And of course REPETITIONS. Repeat every 5 chapters as far as legends are cool, with a description of their coolness. And to say how MC is far from them. What for?From the pros, MC. Nice world.But the main minus is a huge amount of description. Literally describing damage calculation formulas. WHAT FOR? You do not play the game. You cannot manage this data.

Seems to me that you have a pretty nice list of things that should happen to the MC. But you don’t really have much to connect it and make it flow.Ex. You created and killed a character in 2-3 chapters just to give John his cheat.For other readers, this should be a read for those who just want to see a Op character screwing around with common sense. Purely for comedy and fun laughs

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it's a really nice book with an awesome storyline. it's truly amazing, but I believe you can do better with more effort.

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