The only complaint I have is that the writing is sometimes confusing but it seems to be getting better. Other than that i see no major issues to be unhappy about. The idea of a roman reincarnation is awesome as well.
mc is transmigrator which author doesnt tell you till like 6 chapters in, around the 11th chapter it starts to form as a cringe action movie, not to mention how the ml (the girl he saves at the start) falls in love with him, a good book to waste a few minutes on but nothing I would anticipate another chapter for.
Our MC suddenly awakens in the middle of the action of someone trying to kill him. Mc plot hole, he suddenly is able to save himself via a system. The pacing is decent, but simply is not my cup of tea.
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Overall, this novel is decent but there are a few issues.First is, the author explains too much. There's too much explanation about some new building and how it works. Some are unnecessary and some can be said as it is. Second, the fact that the MC dealt with no issues with the citizens apart from the fact that they're too weak is unrealistic. People get jobs and suddenly, they're happy and no problems occurred afterwards. In every place, there are always problematic people. Drunkards for example. There were even no mention of thievery in Dry City, as if everyone just turned obedient conveniently for the MC. Even if every single one of them got jobs, some habits, while they can be dealt with, they don't die easily. Mass migration from people of different places should have introduced some problems but for some reason, they were obedient. Also, the fact that people from other places could successfully migrate to the Black Plain without leaving any traces is also quite unrealistic. If it's the soldiers, then there would be no issues but civilians are hard to control, especially when they weren't yours or when the cultures are different. There is also the lack of skepticism. Although the author tried to explain this part, the fact that the whole population of a city just disappears and migrates to the Black Plain is quite unrealistic. No one stayed behind, especially the old people, who are (not all) supposed to be the most stubborn and difficult to persuade. I'm still currently on chap 371 so the author might have already addressed these on the not so recent chapters but even if he still hasn't, I hope the author reads this for improvement. Overall, this novel is, as I said, decent and full of potential.
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