Star Wars - Rise of the Rust

good story telling, it shows that the author had a deep thinking and not just randomly mixing Magic and technology in the story

System evaluation of host: effective

"What? No! Do you hear yourself Jess? We are not stalkers what are you talking about!?

Because you are the first person Guo Guo saw. The first person whom Guo Guo saw is Guo Guos master!

However I soon realized I stopped improving and instead focused on helping other authors improve.

Aaron seemed to finally realize what was doing and instantly let go of my wrists.

<p>"You came alone? Where are Tom and Hank?" Alex curiously asked as he did not see them tagging along. For the past years, every single day without fail, around this time, Tom, Hank, and Anna would visit Alex together and chat with him. Tom and Hank were 1 year older than him. Hank and Anna were siblings and their parents were friends and teammates of his Uncle and Aunt for hunting. Tom was a single child of his mother who worked as a prostitute in a pleasure house beside the bar in the market area.</p>

"Barely," Namjoon responds, rolling his eyes, and then with a grin rolls up the towel in his hands and snaps it against Jungkook's side. The maknae clenches his teeth shut so his scream isn't heard and Rapmon laughs, patting him on the shoulder.

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Good job author setting the world with good premise. I like the mystery and twist on going back in time aspect, skills and the world looks interesting as well. Grammar is definitely good and prose is easily digestible📚🥂