Joe said in between "Karl we should take you to your house now. You will get better after resting for some days. Dan help me getting that cart from neighbours house so we can transfer Karl safely without opening his wound. Go now "
Wow I’m amazed by this book, has such good storytelling and the typical Main character, the book just started so I can’t say much about it yet but it has a lot of potential. The only complaint I have about this book is probably the pacing but it isn’t all too bad, but the fights and action is very nice and captivating read, I also love the world building. I’m interested in this book and I hope the author keeps releasing chapters constantly
An honest review from a fellow author.The Word building in the first ten chapters is enough to give the novel a solid foundation as they include ample clues about the setting being based around Roman mythology and martial cultivation with a strong revenge theme laying the groundwork for a villainous MC's rise to power.Evidence suggests that you're writing in Russian and translating to English either personality or with AI assistance. Part of chapter 4 is in Russian, and the mother's name switched languages once or twice. Careful with using AI tools, could affect contract considerations.Still rather readable overall. Translator for Super Gene 2 can't even keep genders straight.The premise is solid and I look forward to seeing where you take the story and how you flesh in the cultivation system as you mix Roman mythos with Chinese cultivation elements.+1 on the cat girl maid. The descriptions are good but could be a little less wordy at times. Paragraph length and spacing could use improvements. (To fit better with WN/LN style and platform) Ie. Mobile friendly.As that is how most readers access the platform. Still not that bad as is.
I'm not a big fan of slowburn romance and I always find it weird when the MC just go back in time and is like OMG I regret everything I've done. And it seems like the one who betrayed who actually loves him for real ?!?!
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