Red and White's little conversation corner (Side-story)

His next words made me dumbfounded. You a mere slime doesn't like me?

All that glitters is gold

Puppy :Goda is near the Diama sea.

Str: 98

Hi!I'm the guy who is writing this and yeah I'm gonna give myself five stars because why not?Anyways I would really appreciate it if you could read my book and gimme some feedback, the more feedback I get the better I can get with my writing skillsThanks a lotIkaris

The story isin a complex and gritty world. The writing is detailed and insightful. I believe some parts could be clearer and easier to follow thoughThe dialogue is strong, with characters feeling realistic and unique. The way they react to the challenges around them helps the reader understand their personalities and struggles. The pacing is mostly solid, but a few scenes are dragged a LOT. And although the world-building is rich it gets a little overwhelming with all the details, makiug it hard to keep track of everything.It could be a bit more streamlined, but overall, it’s an engaging story with strong potential.