Reborn in another world with a glass of water

they should be accountable to each other as husband and wife and business partners.  Laura is getting ready to get pregnant right?
Laura deserves to know who her friends are,  needs to watch the tape that shows Vinnie & Hayley together and Ken with Hayley.  what a freaking mess you made! please fix

The novel has a good story to it but you don’t put people perspectives which is a crucial element to ones novel u mix up everything and u kind of rush the story and they are some punctuation mistakes here and there