It was at that instant that thunder started rolling all around them, a clear sign that the battle on the other side was getting more dangerous. Seryu was trying her damn best against those empty humans, their barriers were too hard for her metal ball to break in one strike and when she tried to go for a second one she was bombarded on the other side by the other 3 would rain magic on her. The best she could do was focus on defense and wait till Koro managed to disentangle with those other villains so as to help her. Maybe for 6 could give her the edge she needed.
The opening of the first chapter is engaging and draws the reader into the story with its action-packed scene and mysterious character introductions. The use of descriptive language adds depth and vividness to the scene, making it easy for the reader to imagine the setting and characters.I would encourage the author to continue building upon the strong foundation they've established in this opening chapter. Keep exploring the characters, their motivations, and their backstories to create a fully realized world that readers can immerse themselves in. Make sure to balance action with character development and build tension throughout the story to keep readers invested in the outcome. Keep up the good work!👍
The girlfriend (June) is a woman who conveniently managed to be MC's girlfriend and now wants to dominate him... Will the story have a beta MC?Having a girlfriend, made Mc begin to have symptoms of the typical pathetic and virgin Asian protagonist in a harem manga or anime.Author, you're great at writing, but don't make a pathetic, submissive MC who gets on his knees and begs for attention from his cheating girlfriend.€€€€€€€€€€€€€€€€€€€€€€€Why do asian stories have only 2 types of male leads?Beta "male" protagonist and schizophrenic psychopathic "male" protagonist.
this is about the struggle of the big business empires in Pakistan and their rising and downfall history and addressing all the circumstances behind it military establishment political landscape and the family's alliance and betrayal from the family members pushed into downfall .
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