Lost Soul

Within a few minutes, she came back with some orange juice and placed it on his tray.

Judging by the hole in the satellite picture

I am one of those mixed bag peeps on this while I love this is a sea based and structured type of story and not against that while being a system does make it neat. I hope to see how this story will pick up cause while that pic is enticing I am wondering what to expect. I plan to go into this more just need more time to figure out if I dig this or not. So far is interesting at least. :3

I am up to date on the story. I can say that it is a good story. A good job has been done. The characters, the development, the world are all good enough. I can't say that I experienced any boredom while reading it. You certainly did a good job.  As for the suggestion part, I think it is not right to constantly assign an adjective to predicates. For example, "I'm leaving." his voice was harsh. It is normal to use this at the beginning, but as the story progresses and we get to know the character, the reader should be able to understand such things. Of course, you are the author, the decision is yours. Finally, I wonder how long the story will be, it seems like there are strange events that can be told.

ate bakit hindi mo to I exclusive? sayang ganda pa naman ng plot