Knock Knock - Who Is There?

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It is an okay story for sure. It is still super early on but every chapter seems to get better. I didn't have a moment that I hated, but I did have several that I found enjoyable. Honestly I feel like you either like it or you don't?

I enjoyed the book a lot. Even if the protagonist comes off as rude and proud, but I'm guessing the author was going for that when he was talking in his head.Overall it's a good book. Personally I feel that there are some things that shouldn't be written so much. It takes away the mystery. Keep writing author.

The number of angry 80-year-olds is much lower than the number of angry under 30-year-olds.In all theory, a 418-year-old should be a very patient person.Likewise, if you spend 400 years in "hell" and you lean on something that you don't have, and which gradually becomes a mirage, a distant memory (Like a family) you become crazy to a fairly high speed.I always thought that the novel where the goal of the mc was something passive (here "to protect his family") the novel could only be boring.Just watch all the best anime, imagine if naruto didn't want to be Hokage, if Gon (HxH) didn't want to find his father, if Songoku didn't want to fight powerful opponents, if Light didn't want to kill all the criminals...A goal is at least half of a character, if he doesn't have one then it's a half empty character.In short, let's talk more concrete, the main character could be interesting if he had the will to do something.The world is basic and nothing special.The secondary characters are at least as boring as the protagonist.the writing quality is rather good if we forget the fact that the author does not proofread.the rhythm of the chapters is good.

Translation quality is my biggest issue. The Translation keeps getting worse with every chapter and the word choices made by the Translator are awful. For example, the Translator uses Blood level instead of health and Strength level instead of stamina. This is just one of the few examples. This happens throughout the novel with it getting worse as it goes on.

You can immediately tell that this is one of those stories that will keep you engaged until the end. I was really surprised at the quality for web novels but this one changed my mind and ill look into other stories now as well.

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This is a review after reading 52 chapters of the story. The story is, like the title suggests, a cultivation story with a system. Now, what I like about the story.Pros :1. The first person narrative that author uses. It’s extremely unique in cultivation novels which are usually done in third person. Refreshing for those that want to try a cultivation novel written in a different way than others.2. Writing quality is excellent, I mean, there are no glaring flaws. That’s already an up as that’s all you really need. Author is pretty experienced, so this is to be expected.3. Update stability is great, so that’s another major plus for the story. 4. Although MC has his flaws, what Mc has no flaw? The flaws are there to make us readers symphatize with the Mc and watch him grow. The longer we read, the more we see him fix his flaw and slowly mature into the ’ideal MC’ Cons :1. MC relies too much on his system. Yes, it’s a system story, and I also get that one should exploit a cheat once they have it, but Mc needs to also learn to be more independent and instead of asking system all types of questions that he probably knows the answer to, ask more thorough ones that we readers don’t already know. Of course not all of the information is useless as there is a lot useful one, but it can be a bit tedious.Perhaps skip all those unecessary words by writing something like, ‘MC for the next hour or so asked MC all sorts of questions. Dumb as some of them were, he wanted to get everything straight, not missing anything out. After all, just a single detail could cost his life.’ Makes the MC look smarter and skips a lot of unecessary information that can be spread throughout the chapters.2. This is more of a personal preference, but in first person narrative, I feel like the paragraphs are a bit too chunky. Can be cut shorter to be more pleasing to the eyes. (Just my personal preference.)3. MC can be a bit indecisive at times, but that’s normal, jn fact, this is not even a con, I’m just putting it here in case Author forgets that character development exists. I get that MC is in an unfamiliar world, but CD is very important, don’t forget this.Well, that’s all from me. Although it looks like there are more cons than pros, most of the cons are just my suggestions to author on how he could develop the story for future continuity.Those flaws can easily be fixed and contribute to future of the story.Good story, would recommend.