aiiiiiii, we got an another one!!!.............................................................................................................................................................
why is this out of trial reads? fdsfdfddfdfddhsfdgfdgfgafdgfdgfdgfdgfdsgfdgfdgfdgdfgfdgfdgfdgfgfgfdgfdgfdgfgfdggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg
Nice story and worlds building, although sometimes some actions might be contradictory to the character description of being cautious, but hey they still somehow fit good into the story and make it better
It's pretty well written. But there are some things im not comfortable with. The inner monologue, for example, is written in pretense tense and can sometimes be distracting since there are no italics. Other than that it's pretty well written.
-Ace: "Sabo died following his dream, against everything, he went to the sea to fulfill his dream no matter how much we told him that we wanted him to wait for us" with more tears on his face and a more pronounced cry, his face of Jove contracted and her tears came out even more than before, Ace followed
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