Hello great author, I'm a huge fan of your work! Your book left a lasting impression on me, and I believe it has the potential to reach even more readers. I'd be honored to share some thoughts on how to enhance its impact and visibility. Would you be open to hearing my thoughts?
Ah, lust, that age-old sin that men (and women) can't seem to stop. Now, if you're an avid follower of me, you'll know that I would never recommend this to anyone due to the evil nature inside these pages. Ya know: devils, sacrifices, and rituals. Notwithstanding, Zexusgo seems to wish to refine their writing craft. Let's see if we can give him pointers.So the story takes place in this fantasy world that centers on betrayal, transformation, and some survival. Zexusgo employs LITRPG mechanics, so it's clear where this story is headed.Ishar (the MC) is basically sacrificed to a devil (Satanic) by his comrades, which is where his journey begins. Zexusgo does a great job pacing things; we'll give him that. I think it's due to the LITRPG aspect because his action scenes are interesting enough to understand.Do we like Ishar? Heck no. Haha. He's a little complex that struggles too much after transforming. That's good, though, because it allows readers to understand him more. I favour Kael more. That or Rudrik. So you better not slack off on them, Zexusgo.Here are the things to improve on: explaining the LITRPG system so readers aren't lost on Ishar's ability sets, a better background to understand why Ishar was betrayed, and better dialogue (since they seem forced).This is Akito, hoping those who are lost may come to Jesus Christ as their Lord and Saviour.
The novel is good and enjoyable, and the characters are good and built in a tight and clear way without any additional complications. So, it can be said that the novel is very good and worth your timeKeep writing and moving forward
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