The story is so cool and very descriptive. Everything about the novel is 🔥🔥🔥. I recommend this book. Keep it up author, you are doing great. This is a masterpiece. 💪💪💪💪💪
I just gave it average (3) on anything I don't know the answer to, since I only seriously read one chapter.The English was too much for me, so I can't read it.If I had to give advice, learn what a period is and how to stop run on sentences. That's the most glaring flaw I saw, present all the way to the latest chapter at the time of writing - 104 or something, new world, new customs?I'd also probably try and correct at least the first chapter's grammar at some point, since it plays a large role in deciding if new readers want to stick with a book.Still. The idea has potential, so don't take the review harshly. Keep writing and doing you. I just don't like it when all the reviews say something I think is a blatant lie, like the English being flawless.You know more languages than I, no shame there.
The writing is absolutely great! I was pulled in with every paragraph! I normally don’t like most reincarination plotlines but from very the very first chapter I was interested. I recommend readers check this story out you won’t be disappointed.
Writing Quality: 4/5Your chapters are well-written, I really enjoyed reading through them due to the detailed descriptions. Your vocabulary is also quite good. I'm reading on my PC so some of the paragraph lengths don't bother me as much. However, you could consider separating a few of your paragraphs (mainly information about the world, an object, or a place) to make them shorter. That way, mobile readers won't be faced with text walls. In regard to grammar and mechanics, I'd recommend editing through your chapters once you've written them. There are one or two spelling mistakes which can be easily corrected.Stability of Updates: 5/5I'm not sure about your schedule for updates, but it's pretty consistent right now.Story Development: 4/5The development of your novel so far is good. You have introduced the protagonist (as well as his background and relationships), then depicted the direction of the novel. You have also hinted at a subplot/complication in the second chapter which may be important in the future, which increases the urge to continue reading. I like the action in the latest chapters, but I'd suggest adding more sensory detail to enhance your writing.Character Design: 4/5Your characters are designed really well. I like how you have weaved in little details that enrich the personalities of your characters. (E.g: Riley making sure to pick the burnt pancakes for himself.) This creates depth in your characters, and also demonstrates the relationship and bond between the siblings ^ - ^ The banter between the brother and sister pair is also very realistic. In regard to other characters, I like how you have incorporated Riley's thoughts about them in your descriptions. Rather than blandly listing their characteristics, you have presented them in a more fluid and natural manner.World Background: 4/5I like your execution of worldbuilding ^ - ^. I generally don't read cyberpunk novels, however, you have written it in a way that's ****** and clear to understand. I've mentioned this before above, but I enjoy how you've connected information regarding the world with Riley's thoughts and comments in your writing. This way, it's more interesting and seems more authentic.I enjoyed reading this, good luck with future chapters ~
Its peak aot cant compare at all....................................................................................................................................................
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