Dios mismo desearía tener mi suerte?!

In the shape of an "L" on her forehead

"IYEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH SEEEE YOUUUUU MYYYY SUCKKKKEEEER SONNNNNNN!" My father answered with his Madisgood accent.

i just want to review for the free FP.. 😁😁🫰🏻🫰🏻🫰🏻

nice story but I am not able to understand

I really love the book but can you please put more chapters out there I think that this book has a future

I absolutely love this book and I hope for more chapters to read, the characters are great and have depth, the story is new and the world background is great as well.

I don't speak English, so forgive me for any mistakes. Honestly, so far I have nothing to complain about.He introduced a cast of 5 characters to be the main cast, which is a good number and also seems to have a good space to explore all of themThe main character is good enough and has potential to be explored, cool action scenes and plots, but for now it's hard to judge very accuratelyBut there are only 2 flaws that bothered me, 1 relatively silly and the other a little more seriousLet's start with the silliest one, be careful with the amount of unique terms you put in the work, remember that this is a novel, not a manga or anime, so there is no imageIf you put an absurd amount of terms like you are doing, there will come a time when, if someone simply stops reading for 1 or 2 months and comes back, they will be completely lost in the work, especially in the attacks.Most of the terms in the works are very intuitive and used in key moments of the work, with chidori and RasenganYou invest a lot in a short time, just be a little careful.Now the most serious thing is about the world building, the dystopian setting is intriguing, I liked how you structured it, but you exaggerated, the examiner scene was really badAre you telling me that this whole society is so dystopian, but all the cadets outside of Mikhail's squad are simply innocent at that level?Also, the fact that the Dominiques are totally disdainful even makes sense considering the idea of ​​them being on an absolute throne but the others don't make sense, they are soldiers who have gone through everything the others have gone through so their tone at that moment should have been something more complex, something like wanting to pass on a lesson to the next generation or a hatred remembering their past self. Anyway, I had other ideas but absolute disdain with touches of disgust doesn't make sense.I could have done that, but instead of Mikhail reinforcing these actions, there should have been a veiled criticism of him, showing how, although the boy was right about the supervisors being incompetent and incapable of protecting the academy against students who fought for their lives, they are like absolute authorities that cannot be challenged, which would give a new air of refreshing authoritarianism.Besides the functioning of this society, it is not at all functional, but I can ignore that since it is a dystopia, but even within a dystopia there is a very well-established social logic, with powers ensuring that it works, but for now it is forced.But apart from these 2 points the rest is sensational, I hope it continues with enormous potential, congratulations for that