Cthulhu Gonfalon (editing)

That s what you except from a person that transmigrated not the bull*hit Hero type MC. Good read hope it gets choosen!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This story is a "turn off your brain and enjoy it story". It's a classic: VRMMO story, the world is real interesting and you can have a lot of fun reading it, but there are such better stories to read of the same genre in this website. This story relies on random bullshit plot armor to progress on every single chapter. the protagonist personalist is a human equivalent of a bag of garbage. He is not evil and calculating cool mc, but instead he is just a giant asshole which everyone loves for no reason.  The author is constantly buffing and nerfing the protagonist through random plot bullshit events that come out of nowhere. Too OP: here some random plot bullshit to nerf him, Too challenging:here is some random plot armor to help you. Even when there is an explanation for the plot armor, it usually just dumb and forced. He also likes to tell stupid lies, when telling the truth would often be more helpful and less troubling.

11/10, story may seem similar to another card related novel, but the story is 10x more entertaining. Best scene so far is when the MC figured out how to carpet bomb an entire compound with cows/bulls. Just hundreds of cows falling down from the sky, demolishing everything in sight. Now this is the content we need.

Loving the story please keep it going man

Writing Quality, it turns out Raven is not a talking bird... It is a bit abnormal to have a female name, as a male MC... 1 Capital letter in his first chapter! no not lying its true.He has more capital letters in his review than his first chapter...Writing Quality, it turns out Raven is not a talking bird... It is a bit abnormal to have a female name, as a male MC... 1 Capital letter in his first chapter! no not lying its true.He has more capital letters in his review than his first chapter.................Stability of updates, sense the novel has just started, no comment. but sense each chapter is about 300-500? words and he wrote 6 total 2/3 chapters a week? that is extremely slow.... story development.. It might be there, but I cant really understand what im reading, so you get a 3Character design... I thought your MC was a talking bird, somehow you made him less interesting to me... two poor kids, which no goal or objective, its pretty empty---- I made the same mistake.World Background-- its a bit to early and his chapters are too small. id give him a 4 sense, I see signs of it being thought out.

"OMAE WA MU! SHINDEIRU!" At my loud yelling, I actually managed to deafen the Boss for a bit which meant my attack connected with its head.

Ai Yu tilted her head up and made eye contact with a policeman as he walked towards them. "The culprits have been caught. It's been a tough day, so let's get you home to rest first. Is it okay if you come in for questioning tomorrow or is it too soon?" The policeman asked in a friendly manner.

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