"Kid, I'm sorry. But----" she stopped and looked at the doctor who came in. "How are you feeling kiddo?" he asked and I just nod. "Did you check her vital signs already?" he turned to the nurse, and she just nod to him before leaving.
concept of redemption system is unique! read many cultivation novels before, and most were focused on power mostly. didn't think i'd find one based on character development 😭😭 the humor is also funny, especially the scenes with the mc's third wife. so far, so good.
The power of the powerless Gambler. From the title itself, it sounds promising. I hope more updates are coming soon because I'm already hooked up with the story.
Generally speaking, a better grasp on English vocabulary and speech would make a good addition to the dialogue writing. The characters have good descriptions and the world building is on point with the plot progression but I feel that the narrative itself could use a little nudge based on the actions the characters are taking. Also, the advice you may have read about 'Show - not - Tell' has better interpretations. Show the actions from the perspective/ thoughts of the character in action rather than telling a description of the situation in which the actions are taking place, there is no fault in the descriptions but a central/dedicated theme allows for more instruments to join the music. Ciao!
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