hello, this is my first Boss×assistant erotica romance, so all i ask is that if u really enjoy this book then, spoil this book with ur reviews and gems. and in the middle of the book, it might get some readers upset but all i ask is for u to continue reading to the end...
Overall, the book has a decent start [review as of chapter 70]. Below I have my take on good and bad. Author, thank you for taking the time to create!Good:1) Fights are well described and easy to visualize2) Author does a good job of showing when MC is being smart and when he just thinks he is being smart3) Best friend character is not "Fatty*" [seriously this is worth a whole star]4) So far, his motivations are not due to any annoying tropes like sick family, unreasonable desire for revenge, kidnapping, etc., which I find to be an amazing deviation for usualBad:1) His parents really, really suck. Now you might say that since they are shown that they care about the MC they are good parents, but they did absolutely nothing to train him. In a world where power is everything, going to a good school requires being a good fighter, they refused to train him. If that is not neglect, I do not know what is. They are actively risking his life for no reason. MAYBE, the 4 star general dad had an excuse that he could not personally do it since he was busy, but they are rich enough and have powerful friends, I am sure they could find someone to help. During a training arc, someone has to explain basic, crucial terms to him. He was not even told what things mean, I mean how awful can you be that you cannot even provide your son a glossary.2) To me, it is/was a mystery how strong each of the commandments are. Let alone what happens when you switch. So far, we know you can get new abilities, increase talent etc., but that was not explained at once, it took like 40 chapters for definitions of power to make any sense. There are characters described as being 2nd commandment fighters. Okay, so, is that strong, middle level, apex power? That is not at all clear during my read through until later chapters. 3) This might be just me, so not as strong as #1, but the MC gets mad at every little thing. "If I wasnt hiding my powers I could beat you!!!!!!!!1111!!!!" Truth is, he cant. The MC is too big for his breaches which is fine in a weak to strong type MC, but he keeps getting beat down and never learns his lesson, makes it seem like he is throwing a temper tantrum that someone who is 2 whole levels higher than him, is in fact stronger.4) The author keeps referencing some "big event" in the past. I get it can be part of the story later and helps to define personalities and interactions of your main cast and chapter 70 in a webnovel can be just the beginning. But it comes up too often for all these vague terms in conversations to make sense. When your aunt and mom privately talk about sometime important, they would not likely talk about "the incident
Time to throw thousands of ever lasting curses and debuffs onto the MC. If you have a technique that steals his Qi, it should in theory be everlasting. Create your own Qi nuclear reactor, providing unlimited energy.
Instead of progressing the story, author is showing his writing skills by explaing every single event usi g 2 chapters, MC sneeze and 2 chapters gone, MC sh** and 3 chapters gone,MC wipes his a** 2 more chapters gone.... end of your week!
I have read all the way up to chap 36 so far. I am having a hard time finishing the book.The morgiana girl seems to be shaping up to be the love interest so far. It does seem way too early to commit to someone unless the character will grow later and be with someone else but I doubt it with the way the author is writing him up. For a thirty year old person he does act like a kid (even the excuse of staying in character is a little bit exxagerated). One of the main reason people read reincarnation/rebirth novels is to have an MC that acts maturely and does not get flustered when he see a beautiful woman everytime...like seriously there was Victoria's Secret models on earth, why is he getting shocked all the time.As for character design it is very vague, I don't know if the author doesn't know how to write character description or just women's description. But they are all beautiful and the only thing I know is their beauty ranking. Honestly if you have a hard time writing description, as the MC is from earth you can use famous people to describe them to help us picture them.Another weird thing, that huang jin or yin guy asked morgiana to be his concubine but his wife refused to give herself to another man (why the double standard? Is the wife ok for him taking multiple women ...is a woman recognized as the top beauty in a city, a genius cultivator OK with sharing her man? Unless there is some type of abuse going on either mental or physical I really don't see something like that going on. Even more in a world where power is everything, no matter how much power the man is, the more established a woman is the less she can compromise.There is a reason why rich men statistically don't marry rich, powerful, independent women. There is usually a disconnect. "power couples" is usually in the realm of fantasy, there is always a give and take in relationship even in so called power couple in real life.I will try to read more chapters and update later my review if I see some improvements as usually people get better as they write.It seems it is not a harem novel from an author comment I read. Which is pretty good. But just because it is not harem story doesn't mean author you should scare away from exploring relationship and growth. People change, and someone you liked at 15 may not be the right person at 40 or 30 when you know yourself more or just life happens. I mean the high divorce rate nowadays that divorce is no longer taboo is a good proof of that.So far the most fun and interesting love interest I have in asian novels here is the one from Swallowed star where the girl was obese and the MC still fell in love with her ( yes she lost weight but that was after the MC reciprocated her feelings).
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