This book seems to have the foundations of a great book but is let down by poor writing. if you want to see what I mean I've left comments in the first chapter. another thing is the way speech is handled, having the name after every speech is disjointing. try to build the speech into the sentences. the name after style could then be used for greater effect in confusing fight scenes or when lots of aside characters are talking. Also in general work on the way you express ideas. eg aghh its my alarm is both a unnatural thing to say and disjointing. instead he jolted awake, realizing the dragon roars were in fact his alarm clock. This only an example, there's many ways to do it but this book has a lot of potential if you go back and rewrite it.
To say the truth i was thinking that novel is like the other ones with villains, but no, and that really surprised me, the history is simple but it's good.Ps: I know it's a cliche, but i want him with Alina too.
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Oh this work is so interesting, funny and action packed! You have to love it when characters based on their mythological and historical counterparts act out. And then there is the Male Lead a Supreme Elementalist who uses powers of Elements of Periodic Table, apart from Orthodox elements like Fire. The War with the Imperial Alliance happens in chapter 7 where the true Action starts. It was amazing! A must read for all.
The writing is lazy, hard to understand English. And a lot of dumb situations, for example: Oh no! I've encountered a problem x, no worries though I'll pull the solution y out of my a**.
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