- #1
There are some parts that the author left untouched. A large portion of chapters turn into "plot points" that are unexplored. This makes the author look like they are filling pointless sentences on the screen to just get higher word counts. For example, the students had the desire to join the student council, but after over 200 chapters, I did not notice it being mentioned again. There was only a small cameo or two of the president (who was given an entire pages exploring how strong he is and how much his ability can work with Zhao Xiaoyu's buffed ability of making people happy) of the council pretty much towards the end of a major battle.
Speaking of Zhao Xiaoyu, I'm so disappointed in how she stagnated after her buff. The author said that she could even be able to instant death nightmare beasts because they were basically embodiment of negative emotions, but was never further mentioned. She should be in a training arc expanding her mental energy so she could actually be able to do something like that. She could literally be doing anything else than what she is doing and she could be better. You know why? Because she isn't doing anything!!! She has been constantly pushed to the side after her arc! Pls author! She, Si Zhaohua, and Su Bei shared laughter after such and unfortunate situation! You can't sideline her like this! I thought you'd give her more interactions with Su Bei!!! Not only her, Mu Tieren too! Sorry, I'll cut it short but I'm sad for him for the same reasons.
The characterization in the sacred land of Weixi arc was a weird. How can the protagonist group not have the slightest guilt or reaction to that cruel death of the rebel? Even if Jiang Tianming and his group are less "goody-two-shoes" than traditional shonen protagonists, they should have gotten a slight dialogue of sadness. Even pity would have been okay with me. But they were so indifferent, they became no better than Black Flash! It was like only the lives of people who are useful matter to them? That driver during village cult arc was saved but not this guy? Has the definition of righteousness changed? It felt so out of character that I got whiplash... Their only worry at that time was that Su Bei didn't get the slightest bit of blood on him because he stepped back?? Like, excuse me... He just exploded into gore. Then Su Bei... Just treated it all like a joke? Even if he was characterized as indifferent, he wasn't that indifferent. He's still a teenage boy. The author really messed up...
I was slightly uncomfortable at the use of "Destiny" the intelligence organization as a plot device. It came suddenly and was used just so Su Bei had a better explanation for why he knew so much (actually it wasn't used often in the full story, the organization never appears and fades into the back, only showing up when Su Bei needs something. Why is such a "big" organization so useless...). It felt given, not earned. Something interesting happened while this occured and also not explored, again. He was able to go back to his past and change his background to create the Destiny organization, but he only did it once and it was to give the principal of the Endless school abilities which tied that guy to Su Bei's organization.
That's it??? That's all it took to create an organization that has near unlimited information and resources? If the author cut off all the parts where he wrote something that he would never mention again, he'd be able to complete an entire arc showing Su Bei cultivating his past. That's a big deal being able to alter his past!
Though, it's true that readers may get annoyed at that because it'd be filler, but at least that could tie back to the main plot by creating a stronger backstory he could reveal to the protagonist group and readers. I don't even think it showed the founding of the organization. Just went straight to buddying up with the principal. Hopefully I accidentally skipped over it or something similar. I'd happily admit my mistake if it meant I got ANSWERS!!! I will go back to read and change this part of I see I am wrong.
Su Bei himself has gotten quite boring. Such a sly and cute guy, yet he keeps doing the same thing every time that I was able to predict the plot on my own so easily. Should I become a prophet? What I mean is, it's a simple pattern that the author keeps following. Start of something new---> Su Bei leaves and slacks off---> Main cast deals with problem---> if not completely solved Su Bei sweeps in with solution---> end. Even if he has an image to maintain, his goal is also to preserve mankind. Can't he do more things in the shadows instead of always slacking off? Hehe I do actually enjoy it though. Sometimes, too much is no good.
Ahhhh then the recent chapter got so screwed! He died with no foreshadowing. It was so sudden. More importantly, it was bland and boring! The reactions LACKED reaction! He's a popular character why are the forum users not RIOTING?!?! I endured so much for this moment so why are the emotions so lackluster?! Then he got resed just like when he snaps his fingers.
Ok, to keep things brief, I'm going to end off with saying that the original author (not the translator) really fell off with grammar in chinese. There were so many typos and mistakes he did not fix. That was manageable, though because I liked the characters interacting and plot. With mtl, you might not notice, but in Chinese, it was a bit awkward to read. Anyways if the translator is reading this, I hope you don't get discouraged by this! You're doing amazing. If you get to chapter 300, it's great that you could even make those parts readable because it means you even fixed all those typos and mistakes.
P.s. Qi Huang deserves more wins!! She keeps taking all the Ls and she keeps being done dirty. She, Li Shu and Ai Baozhu need their own arcs to compensate for lack of screen time! They need redemption!
[collapse]Thank you for your time if you read everything.Honestly, it's because I love the characters and story ideas so much that I only took off 2 points. This is only my personal opinion and if you read the story and like it much better than I, that's great! I hope you enjoy!Edit: I'm sorry. After the ending... I can't even bear to go higher than a 3... I could stand the typos (of the original work), the waning characterization, the lack of logic, the sloppy plot points that will never continue... But that ending is too much. Really? Two chapter finisher?? I followed along to the end for Su Bei but no one can fix that complete disaster of an ending. SpoilerThe writing of Su Bei's death and resurrection was so hasty that it's horrendous. Complete in only 2 chapters.
[collapse]Is this really the end? You really can't end it like this. You dragged it on and on and freaking forever only to abruptly end everything. You laid out an entire foundation of Su Bei's character to drag out our emotions for no reason. Then there's everything else. Forget about the plot holes. It's a plot trench. Black flash is never resolved. Foreshadowing of countless nonsense is used to stretch this novel to over 300 chapters for nothing.SpoilerNot to mention how his parents were mentioned over and over a soldier and a police officer as a reason why he is so strong and now it's never mentioned again
[collapse]And what the actual hell? SpoilerIt was good that the (author of the manga) didn't know that the entire world was real because it justified him trying to kill Su Bei off, but now you're telling me he knew it all along? He knew he was leading a world full of living beings to destruction? I can't even define my confusion and rage at this strange turn of events. This is not a satisfying plot twist. The setting was interesting. I could not blame the author of the manga, black flash who are not enemies of humanity, or even the nightmare beasts for existing. Now you tell me it's all falling apart so what was the point of reading?
[collapse]What was writing 300 chapters for, if you did not allow Su Bei to leave with the grace you promised! In the end the character was betrayed by his own author! You might as well have trampled all over this efforts throughout the 300+ chapters! Ugh.I have to say that the characters carried the novel but they weren't even done justice in the end...I can admit, I am the clown for having such high expectations. But instead of at least a punch line, I was literally punched!