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As for the third arc... while there was compelling circumstances, I found the premise and ongoing mission distasteful. The first two arcs fascinated me, but the third one was unnecessarily gory and convoluted. I like when deaths carry their own weight, and with the start of the third arc a few players were immediately slaughtered to show the cruelty of the world. The random selection takes away from the bus line's independence from the MC. Also I've caught on that much of the elements of a dungeon is atmospheric that genuine clues for the reader to follow along, I don't mind but it leaves the third arcs ending in a spontaneous state: beauty was chosen for taste, there is the original pool and cultivated pool, 'it's all in her head, ' etc.
I do like that he has a genuine connection with the bus line, and how can independently come to their own conclusions without the MC.
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