- #1
I do feel this story was trying to be something it wasn't or wasn't able to achieve. The characters feel very basic and not that interesting. The romance is shallow and is more Stockholm-syndrome then anything.Even if this story is just meant to be Yuri Smut. I didn't do anything that interesting. The only thing that makes this stand out from the other smut stories. Is that this is between two girls. The story feels like something I've seen before with the self insert smut stories.You could've had more interesting things happening for the smut tag. Have them explore fetishes or anything. Bondage? Petplay? You could go more out and even go for the milk/cow play fetish. There's a lot that could've been done to make the story not feel so generic.The alternative is to go full A-hole MC. Where instead of falling in love due to just constant s*xual harassment to a girl. Have the MC be straight as can be. But she really is money hungry and the other MC takes advantage of that. So the MC stays around for the money. But also ends up getting used to the s*xual interactions and can't deal being without the girl now. Something just a bit different then what we got preferably.The main character are very shallow and doesn't have much of a personality. The story tried to do some chapters with character-building admittedly. But they didn't really do anything.Someone else said it in the reviews. But the story does come across as light LGBT propaganda. Yuri tends to be light hearted and more sweet. But the story kind of fails at that. I'd probably give it more like a 2.7-2.8 rounded to 3.