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Firstly, the story plot direction is very good if developed well... but ruin by the author incompetent way of writing.The writer portray Ron as jerked which is too much that make me even hate original character because of it. there is no self defined of any character, feel like machine and the author forcing his own crap to character of original.Ivon, Ivan, Evon or whatever is the main guy of the sotry was born in HP (harrypotter) world he is Chinese previsouly though..But from the author sense of view, the reader us can feel he hate is own culture or some crap personal experience encounter in his life to write very ironic story of his protrayment of Ivonthe romance sucks, start making progress after ball chapter (648), I dun like how the main guy (Ivon) being very stubborn for hermoine which is too crap for reader to take in (especially me), I bet the author his having delusional of emma watson and the story character which J.K rowling create, Dude (the author) get a life seriously, I do appreciate your unique story and for spending time creating te story but dun insert too much crap to story and stop dumping to much crap too prolong chapters.summary:you can read this novel if you like Hp fan-fic but I dun recommend to those who can bare naive idiotic main lead inserting in friendship of original cast, also with protection of plot armor with force story to create to much crap on whether romance, character ruining or writer view on his own people (Chinese) hatred..... if can bare it plz do go on.anyway thanks for reading my review and I hope I point out facts which some of you hope to express