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Okay, no. I really really tried, but I seriously can't. I'm not kidding when I say it reads like it's written by a 10 year old. Grammar and spelling and whatnot might be okay, but it really gives off a childish feel. Tbh I'm okay with the premise, but the execution feels like something I would write at 10 years old. Seriously, the cringes are uncontrollable. The MC gives off the feel of being smart but actually isn't, and they're both clearly children. A genius Commander at age 12? Uh, smh.That said, if you're in junior high or lower, I would imagine it'd be interesting. Up to you.