Who Let Him Cultivate Immortality Chapter 87 Discussion

A light-hearted xianxia-themed comedy

It's pretty well-written, with its main appeal also being its main flaw.

The characters' thought process are a bit unconventional. This easily creates humoric moments, which is essential to such a story, but perhaps too many characters exhibit this strangeness, resulting in dialogue or developments that seems almost random at times, and contrived/forced at worst. Restricting these strangeness to a specific kind per character or limiting these comedic characters would make the story more believable. As it currently stands, it tests the readers' suspension of disbelief a bit too much for full enjoyment.

Another obvious flaw is with the dialogue. Sometimes it is used as exposition, which is not exactly wrong, but when it's done as an info dump, it is. Rather than being short and witty, dialogue instead becomes a wall of text. This and its info dumping nature makes it very tempting to just skim through it. While good for character counts, it's horrible for enjoyment. If it is to be long to be skip-able, it only works in a comic, not in a novel.

One good thing is that most reveals are done well, or in other words, setup fairly. This is in contrast to many in the same pile trying to look smart yet just withholding any clues and just revealing things as they come for you to revel in the main character's intelligence or something.

Overall it is written pretty ok, and fun to read. Would recommend as a time-passer.

Its probably best as a comic but this is great also.

P.S. The author tries a lot of trope subversion.