- #1
Of the first few chapters, the prologue probably was the best. What waits afterwards: redundant or very awkward dialogue, unnecessary repetition, badly placed descriptions, et cetera. This author lacks some basic writing skills. A big black mark against the novel.The first little bit of story didn't impress me, but it wasn't bad. The protagonist knows where the overpowered character will appear, and provides for him in the hope that he'll profit off of it. I liked how the overpowered character was suspicious of him and didn't feel like being indebted. Imagine: you lie in a remote dark alley, hungry and tired. Suddenly someone approaches you and says he'll feed you and invites you to come with. Reminds me a lot of a white van and delicious candy. It shows some promise in this aspect: the accent does not lie on violence. Something others mentioned already is that in this novel, conflicts are resolved through other means. It's probably the strong point of the novel, but...Ironically I still have a problem with smaller elements of the story, tying in to the writing skills again. The way the writer writes about the protagonist's actions is awkward. The author can't pull off dialogue all that well. No, it isn't because he just transmigrated. It's specifically the way it's written. Also, this novel frequently infringes on "Show, don't tell" as another reviewer pointed out. Another black mark against the novel.I really liked the premise, but execution was sorely lacking. I rarely do not give a novel a fair chance, but this one I really couldn't read any more of. Portraying actions adequately and writing dialogue well are necessities for any self-respecting author. Two stars, because it has redeeming aspects. I've read bad translations and repetitive writing, read through real dumpster fires, but I couldn't stomach this. I don't trust the author to design an excellent plot on the long term either: writing a transmigration story well actually isn't easy.