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Good idea, poor story telling.It reads closer to a story outline, than an actual novel.I guess the worst example is a time skip of a few months, and then a year within a few paragraphs.It almost reads like...Spoiler
I decided to implement a new tax structure: (Info Drop)
It was successful.
After 3 months many merchants and even beastman merchants brought their business.
After a year, it even started to rival the capital's business.
Everyone liked it, and paid their taxes on time.
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