Story of The Ancient Demon King! Chapter 8 Discussion

A super fast paced high fantasy comedy webnovel.

I had read only a couple of chapters of this webnovel but I already have so many opinions about this. I should start with the things I like the most--which is fewer than the things I don't like.

I enjoyed the plot. It is decent and pretty interesting. The subplots are what making me wanted to progress through the story.

The translation is fine. I like the heroines of this webnovel; I enjoyed thoroughly their povs. They do lack some depth but compared to the other 80% Japanese webnovels/lightnovels I'd read in the past, these heroines are already better.

Let's move on to the things that I don't like--though I've already stated one above.

I should start of how confusing the prose is. It's very telly; I can't picture what's happening clearly, and their movements are dull. It really bugs me when I was reading this, and sometimes you would see an adjective that should'nt be there--though I can't tell whether it's the translator or the author.

I think the number one thing that the readers would notice after reading a couple of chapters is the very fast pacing. It's okay to have a very fast paced story but in this webnovel, there are a lot of things missing, hence it gets very confusing.

Tone of this story doesn't work for me. I think the author is trying to mix comedic and serious based on its prose and povs. They are trying to mix the two of those together but it sometimes becomes a mess and thus making it feels insincere. This gave me a vibe similar to a Light Novel I'd read before, and it feels like the author is trying to achieve that but it did not work.

First person perspective and third person omniscient is the two perspectives in this novel. The first person is decent while the third person omniscient feels lacking. Like I said earlier, it is very telly, but for some reason, the third person became a tiny bit less telly but it did not take advantage over the pov.

Main character is very boring to me. I feel like he's just there to take the us to the more interesting characters. Like I said earlier, it is very confusing, and thus I don't know whether he got reincarnated or not. Spoiler

He said something in the later chapters that contradict of the first chapter where he died and got reincarnated.

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His motivations are unknown. He did want to become the demon king like he said in the first chapter, but that is rather weak and not a motivation to me. Spoiler

There are not just enough reasons to convince the me why would he left the village and go on an adventure. He did killed some bandits on the way, but why? His motivations are unknown in the first place. There are not that enough chapters when he was in the village, and I believe extending that would be worthwhile. Why would he kill some bandits even though he wanted to be evil? There are a lot of ways for the MC to become the demon king, and I don't think going on an adventure and save some random girl's lives would end up him to be a demon king.

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His goals contradict his behaviours. I think what viable word for this character should be: cardboard cut.

He became op--and this is not a spoiler because this happens just a few chapters--and where did he get that? This is not very well explained. He became op out of nowhere. Great.

The other characters are what I found more interesting, and I wish I have more pov of them while the MC is in adventure.

The world building is generic. The magic system is not explained in the first place and I should not be surprised to not get any explanation about the world. The mc's way of gathering information is a turn off for me because it's very telly; it didn't world build upon the country. This is high fantasy and I expected to have a great world building.

Overall, I will continue to read this. If you like a mix of comedy and seriousness, then this is might be for you. If you like pretty good characters and not just there to flock over the MC, this might be for you.